The given argument related to human science which tells that what are effective result due to consumption of dairy product. The author made strong assumption that those who follow dairy product in their diet rich have high risk of osteoporosis. There are several evidence missed by author which might not taken into consideration. so that argument may tend toward weak.
Firstly, it truly convincing factor that Milk and Dairy product are rich in vitamin D and calcium essential for building and maintaining bones. But after that assumption says that by following diet of dairy product can prevent from osteoporosis. osteoporosis disease linked to both environmental and genetic factor that cause bones to weaken significantly with age. Author can't mention age group for which diet is useful. whether they are physically fit. If some of them injury, accident so they may fail to recover.
Secondly, author says as per long term study, larger number of people found that who consistently consume dairy product throughout the year of study have higher rate of bone fracture than any other participant in the study. The things such as larger number of people, means out of 1,00,000 how much of people, have consider into study. whether their physical fitness check or not. even if Milk and dairy product have vitamin D and calcium still people may affected by osteoporosis disease, reason might quality of milk and product. Even though author survey only on people who may affected, might survey happen of dairy milk supplier. They not maintain quality, have some mix up ratio of water and milk, so it might effect adversely. whether this bone fracture only due to consumption of daily product through one year. author make survey of one year unknowingly previous situation that may differ.
Author conclude that bone fracture are symptomatic of osteoporosis. Is this only evidence for osteoporosis, the are several other reason which author may miss out. bone fracture may happen due various situation such as if certain accident happen in past, and on bone if say some injury happen same then it might fracture.
To sum up with all, it not necessary to conclusion that by consuming dairy product it have high risk of osteoporosis. There are several other evidence required to strengthen the argument.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 18 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 377 350
No. of Characters: 1885 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.406 4.7
Average Word Length: 5 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.503 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 136 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.084 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.367 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.612 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 256, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[8]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun evidence seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'some evidence'.
Suggestion: some evidence
...ve high risk of osteoporosis. There are several evidence missed by author which might not taken ...
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Line 1, column 332, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...ich might not taken into consideration. so that argument may tend toward weak. ...
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Line 1, column 332, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “so that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ich might not taken into consideration. so that argument may tend toward weak. First...
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Line 3, column 247, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Osteoporosis
... product can prevent from osteoporosis. osteoporosis disease linked to both environmental an...
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Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...o weaken significantly with age. Author cant mention age group for which diet is use...
^^^^
Line 3, column 423, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whether
...ion age group for which diet is useful. whether they are physically fit. If some of the...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 423, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ion age group for which diet is useful. whether they are physically fit. If some of the...
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Line 5, column 316, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'considered'.
Suggestion: considered
...ut of 1,00,000 how much of people, have consider into study. whether their physical fitn...
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Line 5, column 337, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whether
...ch of people, have consider into study. whether their physical fitness check or not. ev...
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Line 5, column 382, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
...er their physical fitness check or not. even if Milk and dairy product have vitamin ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 717, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...up ratio of water and milk, so it might effect adversely. whether this bone fracture o...
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Line 5, column 735, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Whether
...and milk, so it might effect adversely. whether this bone fracture only due to consumpt...
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Line 5, column 735, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “whether” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...and milk, so it might effect adversely. whether this bone fracture only due to consumpt...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 821, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Author
...tion of daily product through one year. author make survey of one year unknowingly pre...
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Line 7, column 109, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...Is this only evidence for osteoporosis, the are several other reason which author may m...
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Line 7, column 165, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Bone
...other reason which author may miss out. bone fracture may happen due various situati...
^^^^
Line 7, column 247, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
...tion such as if certain accident happen in past, and on bone if say some injury happen ...
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Line 9, column 40, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... To sum up with all, it not necessary to conclusion that by consuming dairy produ...
^^
Line 9, column 88, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'has'?
Suggestion: has
...sion that by consuming dairy product it have high risk of osteoporosis. There are se...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13262599469 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58794065534 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.509283819629 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.0371976094 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1304347826 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3913043478 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.60869565217 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33499453947 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0897547457106 0.0743258471296 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109047336536 0.0701772020484 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18517034646 0.128457276422 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131680768923 0.0628817314937 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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