A movie producer sent the following memo to the head of the movie
studio.
"We need to increase the funding for the movie Working Title by 10% in order to ensure a quality product. As you know, we are working with a first-time director, whose only previous experience has been shooting commercials for a shampoo company. Since the advertising business is notoriously wasteful, it stands to reason that our director will expect to be able to shoot take after take, without concern for how much time is being spent on any one scene. In addition, while we have saved money by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors, this savings in salary will undoubtedly translate to greater expenditures in paying the actors and unionized crew overtime for the extra hours they will spend on the set waiting for the assistant directors and producers to arrange things. If we don't get this extra money, the movie is virtually assured to be a failure."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
While it may be true that a movie would fail without the necessary funding, the argument provided fails to make the case so as to why the movie would fail if the budget is not increased by ten percent. Hence, this argument is flawed becasuse of numerous reasons and unwarranted assumptions.
The argument begins by noting that inorder for the film 'Working Title' to succeed the budget need to be increased by 10%. Not only the argument fails to reason the addition of one tenth of the budget inorder for the movie to be a hit, it fails to provide the reason of how that increase in budget is sufficient. While the argument states that the producers hired an inexperienced director who is coming from the advertizement background, it fails to give the proper reason so as to why he would take more time for shooting a scene. The argument, albeit, notes that the advertizing industry is notoriously wasteful, it fails to provide any information of that particular director they hired. One can't attribute the skill of a person based on the general opion of advertizing industries.
Additionally, the argument states that they hired inexperienced assistant producers and directors for saving money.
They haven't mentioned how much they are paying for these fledgling directors and producers. This provides an open point for discussion on whether they are saving enough to compensate the actors and other unionized crew with the amount saved. This also brings us to note that the argument doesn't mention about the compensation provided for actors and other crew members.Had the argument provided the exact compensation details then it would be reasonable to ask for the extra budget provided those reasons are backed up by financial sheets.
Lastly, the argument concluding the movie is virtually assured to be a failure. The argument is equating virtuality to reality which is a flaw by iteself.
Because of the following unwarranted assumptions that the argument is constructed upon, the argument fails to provide a letter that would persuade the head of the movie to increase the budget by one tenth of the budget.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Hence, this argument is flawed becasuse of numerous reasons and unwarranted assumptions.
Error: becasuse Suggestion: because
Sentence: The argument begins by noting that inorder for the film 'Working Title' to succeed the budget need to be increased by 10.
Error: inorder Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Not only the argument fails to reason the addition of one tenth of the budget inorder for the movie to be a hit, it fails to provide the reason of how that increase in budget is sufficient.
Error: inorder Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: While the argument states that the producers hired an inexperienced director who is coming from the advertizement background, it fails to give the proper reason so as to why he would take more time for shooting a scene.
Error: advertizement Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: The argument is equating virtuality to reality which is a flaw by iteself.
Error: iteself Suggestion: itself
Error: virtuality Suggestion: No alternate word
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 355 350
No. of Characters: 1731 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.341 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.876 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.702 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 124 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 92 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.357 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.033 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.357 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.611 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.136 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 122, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...rgument provided fails to make the case so as to why the movie would fail if the budget ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...und, it fails to give the proper reason so as to why he would take more time for shootin...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 695, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...hat particular director they hired. One cant attribute the skill of a person based o...
^^^^
Line 6, column 6, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...s and directors for saving money. They havent mentioned how much they are paying for ...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 288, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...lso brings us to note that the argument doesnt mention about the compensation provided...
^^^^^^
Line 6, column 369, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Had
...vided for actors and other crew members.Had the argument provided the exact compens...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, lastly, may, so, then, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1773.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 352.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03693181818 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77208537419 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480113636364 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7619266457 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.642857143 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1428571429 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.07142857143 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141867977405 0.218282227539 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579915181733 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049872487653 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0802594554347 0.128457276422 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0343748537593 0.0628817314937 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.