The argument avers that Nature's way, a chain of health food and health-related products stores, looking for opening a branch in Plainsville will be a success. The author provides the basis of his conclusion. However, in my opinion, there are fallacious and can lead to a plethora of different scenarios. Before reaching any conclusion, let us scrutinize each assumption from different perspectives.
Firstly, the author throws an unprovided claim that the new franchise in Plainsville will be a success and continue on to provide his hypothesis for the same. He/She suggests, without any supporting survey or fact, that other stores of the same chain were successful in area where people were healthy. Even if we take author's word for it, there can be other reasons for which people buy medicines. For instance, a person practicing healthy habits can be genetically diabetic or could be suffering from any terminal disease he/she inherited. A person could be taking medicines for allergy. A person could be taking valium for anxiety. All of the aforementioned are are healthy but still taken medicines regularly. Thus, it is of stark importance to dig in and know about other possible reasons for the demand of medicines rather than hastily reaching a conclusion.
Secondly, there can be other factors that come into play when looking to open new franchise which the author fails to take into account. For example, the demographic condition of Plainsville region is unprovided which is vital to compare it with other towns. There could be possibility that younger population contributed majority of the sales however, plainsville has majority population in their 70s. In that situation, the argument does'nt stand for the assumptions made by the author.
Moving on, although the stores sells both health food as well as health-related products, there is no mention about their individual share in the total sales of other regions where the stores are running successfully. Even though the students are required to exercise it does not warrant that the sales will be in consonant with sales of other franchises.
Lastly, even if one agrees to all the unwarranted claims of the author there is no guarantee that the sales will skyrocket. There are n number of scenarios possible for other stores. For example, the stores in other areas might be selling the medicines to stores outside their region leading to increased sales. That, for sure, can't be taken as a basis for forming an argument.
To sum up, the argument is brittle because of the assumptions made. It can be made stronger if the author pays heed to and works on the above-mentioned fallacies.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2169 1500
No. of Different Words: 218 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.941 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.747 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 157 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.292 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.955 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.277 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 635, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...son could be taking valium for anxiety. All of the aforementioned are are healthy but stil...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 661, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: are
... for anxiety. All of the aforementioned are are healthy but still taken medicines regul...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 436, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ir 70s. In that situation, the argument doesnt stand for the assumptions made by the a...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 55, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...hough the stores sells both health food as well as health-related products, there is no me...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 219, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...re the stores are running successfully. Even though the students are required to exercise i...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 329, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ing to increased sales. That, for sure, cant be taken as a basis for forming an argu...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, second, secondly, so, still, thus, well, for example, for instance, as well as, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2232.0 2260.96107784 99% => OK
No of words: 436.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11926605505 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56953094068 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82828577128 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504587155963 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.9201454901 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.0 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1666666667 23.324526521 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225326971851 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0609457607953 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723244766922 0.0701772020484 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120972231823 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523911993675 0.0628817314937 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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