One month ago, all the showerheads on the first five floors of Sunnyside Towers were modified to restrict the water flow to approximately 1/3 of its original force. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet availa

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One month ago, all the showerheads on the first five floors of Sunnyside Towers were modified to restrict the water flow to approximately 1/3 of its original force. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, restricting water flow throughout all the 20 floors of Sunnyside Towers will increase our profits further.

According to the letter written by the owner to the manager, he claims that one month ago all the shower heads on the first five floors of Sunnyside Towers were modified to restrict the water flow to approximately 1/3 of its original force and this change must have resulted in considerable saving for SunnySide Corporation and now he further adds that if we restrict the water flow in all the 20 floors of the sunnyside Towers the profit margin will increase by a large amount. The suggestion made by the owner is highly flawed and is based on lot of assumptions.

Firstly, the owner should be very well clear with the fact that the billing of the water bills are done on the bases of amount of water used and not with the force they are used hence if the water consumption has not changed then no matter what the force of the water was the water bills will remain same and since there is no data available with the owner about the actual water consumption before and after the adjustment are made we cannot say that water bills will drop and making the same change in all twenty floors will make any difference.

Also it must be noted that few people have lodged a complaint about the decrease in water force, the exact number of the people who launched the complain are also not known and hence this data can't be trusted enough, since only 10 families live in first five floors of the building and out of them "few" of them have registered the complain and also those people who have not registered complain does not imply that they are completely happy with the low force. Therefore decreasing the force with the water moves can harm the people's satisfaction. We can also note the fact that water consumption is season dependent, we tend to use more water in summers and lesser in winters since there is no mention of which weather the water supply was restricted we can draw a very fine conclusion that it will remain the same through the year.

It is also highly passuiable that when the force of water is reduced in all the 20 floors, people will give negative report about the living conditions in Sunnyside Corporation and this will in turn cause a negative image in the market and which will obviously result in less people choosing to live in Sunnyside corporation and this will make the profits go down.Therefore the owner's strategy of getting the profits high by reducing the flow of water can be a very well step to harm one's own image in the competitive world and thus back firing and making the profits less.

Hence it is very clear that by restricting the water flow throughout all the 20 floors of the Sunnyside Towers will not increase there profits and if people find it hard to live in such places then the profits could very well go down easily. The owner's claim is false and should not be implemented.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, hence, if, so, then, therefore, thus, well

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 11.1786427146 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2336.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 511.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57142857143 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75450408675 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.37688130986 2.78398813304 85% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424657534247 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 732.6 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 56.0 22.8473053892 245% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 197.223004693 57.8364921388 341% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 259.555555556 119.503703932 217% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 56.7777777778 23.324526521 243% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.11111111111 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291980644002 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115621416256 0.0743258471296 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115427843511 0.0701772020484 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176678850583 0.128457276422 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101057867926 0.0628817314937 161% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.5 14.3799401198 198% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.56 48.3550499002 65% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.8 12.197005988 187% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.11 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.32208582834 107% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 12.3882235529 222% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 24.4 11.1389221557 219% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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