One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure, no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. Clearly, modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits further."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of the reading passage insists that Sunnyside Corporation should change their showerheads that can restrict maximum water flow to one-third of what it used to be, which are in all twelve Sunnyside Towers. The author argues the change will increase profits without any serious problem due to the cost-saving from the alteration. However, in my perspective, the argument is flawed and needs to provide more evidence to strengthen the claim.
To begin with, the author needs to provide evidence to support the claim that the change will bring no problem. According to the reading, there are a few complaints and not a big deal. However, it is possible that the problem is not negligible as the author claim. In addition, in the near future more complaints might be cast from a wide range of people in the tower because the reported complaints were collected for a month thus a small fraction of the total complaints are collected. Thus, before giving the exact number of complaints and its contents collected for sufficient period, the author cannot convince us.
Even conceding that the complaints in three towers can be deemed as a minor problem, the author hastily concludes that there will be no complaints also in the other nine buildings. The author draws what might be a poor analogy between the three towers’ circumstances and the other nine towers'. There might be possible differences between buildings. It is plausible that nine buildings are at a high altitude and thus more inconvenient when showerheads are changed to water-saving ones, leading more complaints and disagreements. In this regard, the author should illustrate all details information about surrounded environments of the buildings.
Moreover, the author should explain how much savings will be because of the change of showerheads. The author unfairly assumes that restricted maximum water flow obviously results in the reduced usage of water and fails to consider and eliminate other possible consequences. The most probable result is that people use more water because they have to take a shower longer than ever before. In this case, the corporation will end up paying more monthly payment for Sunnyside Towers water usage. In short, before making the suggestion, the author has to suggest the actual readings of water usage when it becomes available.
In a nutshell, the author gives the unwarranted claim that Sunnyside Corporation should expand its modification of showerheads to all of its buildings based on the implication that the showerheads will obviously contribute to reducing spending on three buildings. To bolster the argument, the author should provide all three aforementioned evidence.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 2218 1500
No. of Different Words: 200 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.146 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.755 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 173 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.55 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.541 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.45 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.543 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 41, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...Moreover, the author should explain how much savings will be because of the change o...
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Line 17, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... usage when it becomes available. In a nutshell, the author gives the unwarr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, then, third, thus, as to, in addition, in short, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2286.0 2260.96107784 101% => OK
No of words: 431.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.30394431555 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84985292692 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480278422274 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 694.8 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.22255489022 284% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3912680127 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.3 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.55 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264590167186 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0774257015176 0.0743258471296 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847526057511 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153542993291 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.069524417461 0.0628817314937 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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