"In order to reduce costs, we should close some of our existing small assembly plants and
build a large central plant. Grandview would be an ideal location for this new plant. First, of the
locations that we have considered, Grandview has the largest adult population, so that we will
be able to staff our plant quickly and easily. Second, since the average wage earned by
workers in Grandview is less than that in the other locations, we should be able to keep
production costs low. Last, as an inducement for us to build there, Grandview's town council
has offered to allow us to operate for the first three years without paying city taxes."
The author proposed that by shutting down the small plant and to build a large plant in the Grandview location. The author considers that the workers have earned less wage and largest population of the location are adult. However, the proposal contains some critical flaws and will not be accepted if it fails to answer some assumption. Moreover, the assumption will help to draw an accurate conclusion and finally reject the untruth assumption.
The first problematic issue is the author assume the Grandview location as an ideal location of the new plant without any firm evidence. Another is, samll plant is proposed to shut down and build a new plant but the author did not consider the cost involving with the plant establishment. Moreover, closing of the samll plant and build another plant is a prolong time but the proposal does not contain any information related to it.
The second issue is in the Grandview location largest population are adult but my question, is the worker ready to work for the plant? The author assumes that they are ready for the work which is quite unreasonable. Moreover, the wage of the worker is low does not mean that worker will be agreed to work with the same wage.
The third problem is the author only calculate the availability of the worker and the wage but another cost involving the plant is not considered like the raw material, transportation cost and electric charges etc. Finally, author epressed that tax will not be paid for the plant for three years. It may be possible that, other location has more benefit like tax will not pay for five years. In the proposal there is no evidence.
While the overall hypotesis is quite interesting but will not validate further because of lack of information. The proposal
will be accepted if the alreday referred weakness is removed and answer all the assumption accurately.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 318 350
No. of Characters: 1519 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.223 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.777 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.488 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 99 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.035 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.355 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.606 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 354, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... samll plant and build another plant is a prolong time but the proposal does not contain ...
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Line 5, column 38, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'location the largest'.
Suggestion: location the largest
... The second issue is in the Grandview location largest population are adult but my question, i...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, so, third, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 55.5748502994 45% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1561.0 2260.96107784 69% => OK
No of words: 318.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90880503145 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57836515113 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468553459119 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8813553845 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.5625 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.875 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5625 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269870326709 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.09569610458 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873417308371 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124554608709 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0970027938423 0.0628817314937 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 98.500998004 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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