Our previous experience has been that our stores are most profitable in areas where
residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. We should therefore build one
of our new stores in Plainsville, which clearly has many such residents. Plainsville
merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise equipment are at all-time
highs. The local health club, which nearly closed five years ago due to lack of business,
has more members than ever, and the weight-training and aerobics classes are always
full. We can even anticipate a new generation of customers: Plainsville's schoolchildren
are required to participate in a program called Fitness for Life, which emphasizes the
benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
The author is right about building new store in the area where residents are concerned
with leading a healthy life. As the years are passing by people are becoming more health
conscious than before. So the store will sure be profitable in the Plainsville.
The author mentions that the merchants in Plainsville reported that the sales of running
shoes and exercise equipment are all time high. He also mentions that the local health club
was about to shut down but now it has more members than ever. So the need for these products
will be in high demand which benefits the store in selling more products. This clearly tells
that the store will sure be profited.
The argument also says that it can anticipate more customers in future as the schoolchildren
in Plainsville are required to participate in a program called Fitness for Life. This will
for sure predict that more customers will be there in the future which benefits the store.
So the argument about setting up stores in the Plainsville in right. The author provides
enough evidence on how the store will be profited and also will have more customers in
future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 30, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...concerned with leading a healthy life. As the years are passing by people are bec...
^^
Line 16, column 85, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...fited and also will have more customers in future.
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 55.5748502994 43% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 958.0 2260.96107784 42% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 194.0 441.139720559 44% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9381443299 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73207559907 4.56307096286 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47255097886 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 106.0 204.123752495 52% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546391752577 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 290.7 705.55239521 41% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6886571391 57.8364921388 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.0909090909 119.503703932 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6363636364 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.54545454545 5.70786347227 27% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 13.0 5.15768463074 252% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168782382509 0.218282227539 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0791409103774 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0679413855561 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0699225747154 0.128457276422 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518327135866 0.0628817314937 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 48.3550499002 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 98.500998004 43% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.