"Over the past two years , the number of shoppers in the central plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has been increase dramatically. many Central plaza stores owner believe that the decrease in the their business is due to number of skateboard users in the plaza . There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in city plaza .If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in central Plaza will retuen to its previously high levels".
Here, the letter to the editor of the city written by one of the shop owner of the decribed city mall plaza posits that the decline in the number of spendthrifter in the mall is because of the plethora of skateboarders in the mall and by prohibiting them inside the mall will surely increase the business of Central plaza. However, the shop owner has posited this conclusion by neglecting many other reasons for the decline in the shoppers and his statement is conatining many loopholes.
First of all, the shop owner implies that there is a steady decrease in the number of shoppers over the past two years, but he has not lucid about the situation of the shoppers before two years. It is possible that there is a steady decrese in the shoppers way longer than two years and as a result of that the number of skateboard users have increased in the city plaza. By looking this way the role of reason and result have been interchanged.
Secondly, the shop owner suggest that glut skateboarders are the main reason for the decrease in the number of shoppers in City Plaza mall. There can be many different reason too for the steady decrease in the number of shopper. It might be possible that, a new private shopping mall has been constructed in the city and it provides a variety of new shops and discounts inside that mall is more than the shops in the City Plaza. Or, It is also possible that the shop owner in City Plaza are charging more than any other shops in the city and due to this the denizens of the city have started going to random shops rather than going to City mall and pay surplus amounts.
Moreover, the letter also posits that the there is an increase in litter and vandalisms too because of the skate board users in the city plaza. However, he had not backed those claims by any evidence that the skate board users are the only reason for the increased litter and vandalism in the mall. It is also possible that the shop owner are not meticulous about paying enough monthly maintainance to keep the mall clean from litter and other waste. This might also be the reason for the predilection of the shoppers not visiting City plaza anymore.
Finally, the shop owner concludes that by prohibiting the skate board users in the City Plaza can increase the number of
shoppers again. This also can be faulty reason, because the skate board users can be a great attraction to the City Plaza as they can entertain the shoppers by showing cool tricks on the boards.
Hence, it can be said that the letter is lacking various other reason for the decline in the shoppers in the city mall. Shop owner sould be more skeptical while writing such letters.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 480 350
No. of Characters: 2145 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.681 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.469 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.273 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.235 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.017 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.765 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.431 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.62 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.209 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 427, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s way the role of reason and result have been interchanged. Secondly, the shop...
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Line 5, column 154, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...oppers in City Plaza mall. There can be many different reason too for the steady decrease in t...
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Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed those claims by any evidence that the skate board users are the only reason fo...
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Line 7, column 365, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the shop owner are not meticulous about paying enough monthly maintainance to ke...
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Line 9, column 121, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he City Plaza can increase the number of shoppers again. This also can be faulty ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, while, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2196.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 480.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.575 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32001781004 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.35625 0.468620217663 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 685.8 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.5716309995 57.8364921388 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.176470588 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2352941176 23.324526521 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88235294118 5.70786347227 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226513049785 0.218282227539 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957650937499 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642239601551 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128623774739 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0674062390569 0.0628817314937 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.3550499002 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.197005988 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.58 12.5979740519 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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