Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels
The argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily the argument is based on the claim that, there has been a significant decrease in the number of shoppers at the plaza due to increase in the skateboarding in the past years.
The argument fails to provide justification about the number of shoppers who's businesses have decreased. For one, it may be a case that there are very few business owners who's business is affected. There may be some other reasons for the decrease in the number of shoppers at the plaza. The argument should have provided the information about the number of Plaza Store owners who's business significantly reduced in the past 2 years.
The argument also leaves many unanswered questions, the plaza store owners blame skateboarders for vandalism and amount of litter in the plaza. The argument should have provided information about the number of skateboarders involved in the plaza. It may be a case that the litter and vandalism is not because of the skateboarders but because of people who visit the plaza.
The business owners fully blame skateboarders for decrease in their business. The argument without any warrant blames skateboarders for reducing businesses. There may be a situation that in past 2 years some different shopping mall or a plaza is recently opened nearby and hence many people visit the new plaza rather than old one.
Finally, the shop owners claim that prohibiting skateboarding will increase their business, but the city should fully analyze the situation and then take suitable actions as there are several assumptions made into this argument and hence fails to convince the case.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 269 350
No. of Characters: 1349 1500
No. of Different Words: 119 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.05 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.015 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.747 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.692 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.667 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.441 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.499 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 74, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: who's
...tification about the number of shoppers whos businesses have decreased. For one, it ...
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Line 2, column 171, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: who's
...that there are very few business owners whos business is affected. There may be some...
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Line 2, column 376, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: who's
... about the number of Plaza Store owners whos business significantly reduced in the p...
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Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...lism and amount of litter in the plaza. The argument should have provided informati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, if, may, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1376.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 269.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11524163569 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7871572122 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 122.0 204.123752495 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453531598513 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.876978143 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.846153846 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38461538462 5.70786347227 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3230047473 0.218282227539 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135752925468 0.0743258471296 183% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0918521838005 0.0701772020484 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.196183440482 0.128457276422 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0692558045803 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 98.500998004 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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