Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Educational institutes play a pivotal role in the overall development of a person. The educational institutes are responsible for providing quality education to the students in their particular field of choosing. But I disagree with the claim that the Educational institutions have the responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing the fields of study which they are unlikely to succeed.
Firstly, the Educational institutes have no right to judge a person and make decisions for the person. According to me the field of study should be only chosen by the student depending on the passion and other factors. If you choose a field of study which abreast with your passion, you are definitely going to be successful in some or other way. The definition of success is different for different individuals, like for some success means more money and fame but for others, success means social recognition.
For example, consider Apples Founder Steve jobs, he left college in his first year with no clue of what he will be doing and his passion to earn more money led to building of an integrated computer which we all ended up loving it. If his professors had dissuaded him, we may have never seen Apple to grow into such a huge company. It is completely dependent on the individual to choose the field of study and the educational institutes have the responsibility to bolster students in their path. For example if a student comes from a poor family and he has to pursue a particular field in which he is not passionate about, in order to be a breadwinner for the family so instead of dissuading him in his paths educational institutes should make an effort to open more opportunities and to encourage the student to continue, by doing this it may be the case that student becomes passionate about the field as he supporting his family and for him that is success.
In conclusion, it is up to individual to choose the field of study and educational institutes should support the student in his endeavours.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: ACCORDING_TO_ME[1]
Message: This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using 'in my opinion' or 'I think'.
Suggestion: In my opinion; I think
...rson and make decisions for the person. According to me the field of study should be only chose...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, may, so, as to, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 343.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8804664723 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90680349923 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483965014577 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 539.1 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 97.8616866921 60.3974514979 162% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.5 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.5833333333 23.4991977007 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58333333333 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438306290504 0.243740707755 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.202562964638 0.0831039109588 244% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.214384306944 0.0758088955206 283% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.32263480857 0.150359130593 215% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.208064657953 0.0667264976115 312% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.62 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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