"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
It seems axiomatic that prohibiting skateboarding in central plaza can increase the overall number of shoppers in central plaza. To justify this recommendation, the author cites that the popularity of skateboarding has increased significantly while the number of shoppers has decreased steadily in last two years. while supporting the recommendation, however, the author makes several assumptions that cannot be taken for granted. thus, in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the expected results, many questions should be answered.
As a threshold matter, the author hastily assumes that the cause regarding the reduction of number of shoppers is the increased popularity of skateboarding. Although this might be the case, it is possible that the cause is related to other factors, such as economical or fashion trend over the past two years. if the global or regional economy suffered from severe crisis over the past two years, then the contraction of the number of shoppers might have stemmed from the crisis. Perhaps, goods from internet shopping have been more popular and even cheaper than that from central plaza, making less people shopping in central plaza. therefore, it is hard to regard the number of shoppers to be increased by forbidding the skateboarding, if other factors contributing the number is still significant. thus, the question regarding the other factors that can influence the total amount of shoppers in central plaza should be answered in order to assess the recommendation.
even conceding that the other factors but the increased popularity of skateboarding have influenced the total number of shoppers slightly, it is possible that there is no such cause and effect relation toward the popularity of skateboarding and the number of shoppers. it is still possible that past two years are somewhat extraordinary, that many people disinclined to go to shopping in central plaza. also, the increased popularity of skateboarding might positively affect the total number of shoppers, if people who want to enjoy the skateboarding are tend to shop after they enjoy the skateboarding. Hence, the question regarding the relationship between the surged popularity of skateboarding and the reduction of shoppers should be answered.
Finally, the argument is still vulnerable in that the author unfairly posits that the surged amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza is caused by the increased popularity of skateboarding. it is also possible that majority of the people who fling their litter around the plaza are shoppers, not people who come plaza to enjoy skateboarding. In this regard, prohibiting the skateboarding cannot help the reduction of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. therefore, the question about the relation between the people who fling their litter and their purpose to come to the plaza should be answered.
In sum, since numerous assumptions are applied to the recommendation, it remains fragile in its form. therefore, questions proposed above need to be answered for better appraisal about whether the recommendation is likely to give expected result.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 490 350
No. of Characters: 2603 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.705 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.312 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.97 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 200 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 147 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 113 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 70 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 44.545 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.761 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.909 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.477 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.723 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.191 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...s decreased steadily in last two years. while supporting the recommendation, however,...
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...tions that cannot be taken for granted. thus, in order to decide whether the recomme...
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...many questions should be answered. As a threshold matter, the author hastil...
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... fashion trend over the past two years. if the global or regional economy suffered...
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...er than that from central plaza, making less people shopping in central plaza. there...
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...rder to assess the recommendation. even conceding that the other factors bu...
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...who want to enjoy the skateboarding are tend to shop after they enjoy the skateboard...
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...on of shoppers should be answered. Finally, the argument is still vulnerabl...
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...e to the plaza should be answered. In sum, since numerous assumptions are a...
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...dation, it remains fragile in its form. therefore, questions proposed above need to be an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, hence, however, if, regarding, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 55.5748502994 137% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2703.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 490.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51632653061 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06400485981 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.391836734694 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 819.9 705.55239521 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4204269607 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.15 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95 5.70786347227 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.349665146659 0.218282227539 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114960829892 0.0743258471296 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0888963037117 0.0701772020484 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19609469994 0.128457276422 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116570683602 0.0628817314937 185% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.3799401198 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.5979740519 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 98.500998004 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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