"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned with the station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, several local businesses that used to run advertisements during our late-night news program have just cancelled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand the coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs
The argument concludes that to increase revenue there they should focus more on the local news rather than the national news in late nights. The evidences cited to support this argument includes that there are more local viewers, more incidents and complaints are happening locally and also the revenue generated through the local population is more than the national one. However the premises cited are not enough to corroborate the weak conclusion due to ignorance other important factors, incorrect assumptions and also inappropriate cause and effect relationship.
Firstly, the argument incorrectly assumes that its only the local population that is contributing to the generation of the revenue. For instance, if there are more national and world wide followers than it will generate more revenue than the local ones.
Secondly, other important factors have been ignored, like Quality of the late night news matters a lot. If it is not enough alluring it is of no use weather it is local or national does not matter.
Moreover, advertisements that a playing a crucial role in producing a better revenue can be quite good and comparatively more if done with great effort and are attracting the more viewers either national or local people. For example, advertisements and news related to the agriculture weather will have more viewers from local residents for late night news than those residing in the big cities.
At last it can be concluded that the argument is weaker due ill supported by the premises. Moreover, it can be bolstered by considering interest of national viewers, increasing the quality of the news (weather) for both national as wells as local. In spite of all improvements the argument written is incoherent and inconclusive.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 283 350
No. of Characters: 1439 1500
No. of Different Words: 145 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.102 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.085 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.778 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 102 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.583 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.041 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.396 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.674 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.068 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 374, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...pulation is more than the national one. However the premises cited are not enough to co...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 179, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled as one.
Suggestion: worldwide
...nstance, if there are more national and world wide followers than it will generate more re...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 179, Rule ID: WORLD_WIDE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'worldwide'?
Suggestion: worldwide
...nstance, if there are more national and world wide followers than it will generate more re...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for example, for instance, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 55.5748502994 43% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1487.0 2260.96107784 66% => OK
No of words: 283.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25441696113 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84121792938 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.512367491166 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9256806005 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.916666667 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 5.70786347227 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234864563619 0.218282227539 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914480349066 0.0743258471296 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0765646879514 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136089427848 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0503146386035 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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