"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level."
In this meme, the business manager recommends to restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level so as to allure more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues. To bolster the recommendation, the business manager cites the following facts; (1) most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with their station coverage of weather and local news (2) local business holders have just cancelled their advertising contracts with them (3) more time were devoted to national news cease their viewership. Close scrutiny of each these facts however reveals that none of the factors lend no credible evidence to buttress their recommendation.
First, the author fails to mention the appropriate criteria for the loss of viewership of their programs. Blaming only to the increased time devotion to national news and less time to weather and local news doesn't give authorized reason for the determent of their viewership. So, other relevant and effectual reasons should be considered in order to know the exact reason for the declination of the programs by the viewers. Thus, the author fails to mention the refined and relevant factors regarding the loss of their viewership.
Secondly, the argument could have been much clearer if they provide viable reasons for the loss of contracts made by the business authorities with them. For instance, every business authorities claim certain facilities to be offered by the television company to them. Hence, their required acquaintances should be clearly known. Moreover, loss of contracts had no any influenced to the station coverage regarding the late news programs. Therefore, the author must provide viable evidence to advocate the recommendation.
Finally, the argument fails to mention one of the key factors on the basis of which it could have been evaluated, for the proper and prosperous running of any institution,various alluring and people friendly programs should be run who can attracts the heart of people towards their programs. Therefore, company authorities should be properly worked regarding these issue. Similarly, viewership of any television show not only depends upon news and weather programs but also depends upon the other programs just like sports, cultural programs and so on. Hence, company's staff should work strongly in order to boost such type of programs so as to gain the viewership. Likewise, various technical issues related to television shows should be also solved, which later on provide immense benefits to the company's profit. Thus, the argument remains unsubstantiated and become open to debate.
In sum, the recommendation relies on dubious assumption that renders unconvincing as its stands. To bolster the recommendations, the author must provide clear evidence perhaps by local study or survey; different technical aspects regarding television programs should be resolved at first, step wise solution to the various problems related to television show should be find out, viewers choice and preferences should be allocated and hence, accordingly such programs should be designed and broadcast and at last, special treatment and facilities to be provided towards the business authorities which later on again make think to publicize their market products on their television.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 519 350
No. of Characters: 2754 1500
No. of Different Words: 242 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.773 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.306 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.752 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 217 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 181 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 121 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.956 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.81 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.312 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 36, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommends restoring'.
Suggestion: recommends restoring
In this meme, the business manager recommends to restore the time devoted to weather and local n...
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Line 1, column 121, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ther and local news to its former level so as to allure more viewers to the program and ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 563, Rule ID: CLOSE_SCRUTINY[1]
Message: Use simply 'scrutiny'.
Suggestion: Scrutiny
...o national news cease their viewership. Close scrutiny of each these facts however reveals tha...
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Line 2, column 207, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...and less time to weather and local news doesnt give authorized reason for the determen...
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Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
... known. Moreover, loss of contracts had no any influenced to the station coverage ...
^^
Line 3, column 447, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rding the late news programs. Therefore, the author must provide viable evidence ...
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Line 4, column 171, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , various
...nd prosperous running of any institution,various alluring and people friendly programs s...
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Line 4, column 228, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'run'?
Suggestion: run
... and people friendly programs should be run who can attracts the heart of people to...
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Line 4, column 240, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'attract'
Suggestion: attract
...friendly programs should be run who can attracts the heart of people towards their progr...
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Line 4, column 636, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...in order to boost such type of programs so as to gain the viewership. Likewise, various ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, finally, first, hence, however, if, likewise, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, similarly, so, therefore, thus, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2808.0 2260.96107784 124% => OK
No of words: 517.0 441.139720559 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43133462282 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86902686781 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.473887814313 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 852.3 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 118.888981828 57.8364921388 206% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 140.4 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.85 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.70786347227 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21631025517 0.218282227539 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0666462681379 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118711913576 0.0701772020484 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133990246298 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118538630588 0.0628817314937 189% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.3799401198 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.51 12.5979740519 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 98.500998004 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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