The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The issue make a threshold claim that the best way for a community to prepare its youths for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by engaging in them a sense of cooperation rather than a sense of competition. I strongly concede with the threshold claim that promoting the feeling of cooperation within the youths definitely help them to motivate to become the person of excellence thoughts and perception, which later on admittedly promote them to become the generous and munificent human being.
The first reason for my agreement with the speaker is that for any individuals to have leadership skills with them in any field in which they pursue, at first the must understand the actual definition of mutual understanding and brotherhood. It is so because without any cooperative behavior, it will be quite difficult for person to achieve complete skills and technique within them. For instance, Kulman Ghising, the chief executive of Nepal Electricity Board has achieved the true service of excellence in his department as he understand the true definition of communal feeling within his organization. Due to his strong determination and persistent, the electricity board which is used to be in debt before five years ago has now in the stage of profuse profit. Therefore, the feeling of cooperation when get instilled within an individual help them to obtain acute progress in their life time.
The second reason for my agreement with the speaker is that when the feeling of competition when get perfectly instilled in an individual may raise indifference within them. As a result, the peaceful scenario of any nation may get disrupted due to such situation. Similarly, such situation will always hide real and enthusiastic talents and partnership between people, which later on may create crisis and chaotic environment within the society. For instance, if an industry runs with the people have ambivalent mind set, then at such situation, it is obvious that the progress of such productive industry will be doomed in the nearby future. Hence, the progressive can only be build up, if all the young people are taught with perfect and sharp leadership skills.
Some may argue that there must be the feeling of competition in any field in which the people so that dilute testimonials result can erupted out. Therefore, every society must strictly induced such environment where young people can strongly put their ideas and their sentiments regarding such ideas and technique should be understand. For instance, in the school, if their is no any competition between the students , then at such condition, the progress of such students will be blocked and interrupted. This will be absolutely impede the leadership skill of youths in later time. However, this point is flawed since implementing a feeling of competition may wash the brain of the youths in wrong direction. Due to such condition, they will march every single steps of their growing period towards the negative direction which ultimately developed the feeling of dictatorship with them and may hamper the entire human race.
All in all if the above factors are contemplated we can easily reach a conclusion that the ideal leadership skills is only developed in youths when they get the absolute notion of cooperation, mutual understanding and brotherhood from their society members. For this, at first the atmosphere of the society must be affirmative regarding youths will power.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: makes
The issue make a threshold claim that the best way for...
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... them a sense of cooperation rather than a sense of competition. I strongly conce...
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Suggestion: understands
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... them to obtain acute progress in their life time. The second reason for my agreement wi...
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... and sharp leadership skills. Some may argue that there must be the feeling of compe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, similarly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for instance, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 83.0 58.6224719101 142% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 12.9106741573 256% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2908.0 2235.4752809 130% => OK
No of words: 561.0 442.535393258 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18360071301 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86676880123 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86847531033 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.465240641711 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 893.7 704.065955056 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.1074638529 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.4 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.05 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280798834968 0.243740707755 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0843833971921 0.0831039109588 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0932059264519 0.0758088955206 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161828386699 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769950273981 0.0667264976115 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.8971910112 164% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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