The memorandum talks about how reducing in devoted time to specific news type has affected their business. Due to increase in time for coverage news, complaints by viewer to television station, were mostly regarding local news and weather. Additionally, cancellation of advertisement contracts by local businesses suggests the restoration of time devoted to weather and local news to its former level. In the memorandum, the conclusion drawn by business manager was not justified by strong evidences.
Effects of a cause do not necessary implies the these effects has to be caused by that particular cause. There could be factors causing the effects. Like in this argument, most complaints concerned with coverage weather and local news during reduction of devoted to weather and local news, do not necessarily implies the reduction of time to be cause of it. These complaints concerned with coverage weather and local news, could be because of content of news or language of news. Complaints concerned with coverage weather and local news could have existed earlier in same number, and was not noticed anybody.
Similarly cancellation of advertisement contracts by local businesses suggests, does not provide sufficient and necessary information for restoration of time to former level. Does these advertisement contracts cancellation caused harm the overall profit of television station? Does these caused the reduction in revenue sources. It might be possible, television station have got national advertisement contracts, which were more profitable than local advertisement contracts, and television station has raised their prices for advertisement.
To sum up, the evidences provided in memorandum by business manager lacks on many grounds and can not lead up to solid conclusion, thus suggests the flaws in conclusion drawn. Use of vague term like 'most of the', instead of providing statistics, and nature of complain weaken the point to be used as solid evidence. Lack of information about cancellation of advertisement contracts by local businesses also does not justify the conclusion.
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 321 350
No. of Characters: 1739 1500
No. of Different Words: 144 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.233 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.417 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.968 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 130 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.062 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.241 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.25 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.578 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.119 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 343, Rule ID: BE_CAUSE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'because'?
Suggestion: because
...sarily implies the reduction of time to be cause of it. These complaints concerned with ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 491, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... of news or language of news. Complaints concerned with coverage weather and loca...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...number, and was not noticed anybody. Similarly cancellation of advertisement contracts...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 181, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this advertisement' or 'these advertisements'?
Suggestion: this advertisement; these advertisements
...storation of time to former level. Does these advertisement contracts cancellation caused harm the ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 208, Rule ID: THE_PUNCT[1]
Message: Did you forget something after 'the'?
...n drawn. Use of vague term like most of the, instead of providing statistics, and n...
^^^^
Line 7, column 212, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...awn. Use of vague term like most of the, instead of providing statistics, and nat...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, regarding, similarly, so, thus, as to, in conclusion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 13.6137724551 15% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1783.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 321.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.55451713396 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.03466768941 2.78398813304 109% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479750778816 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6849480561 57.8364921388 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.4375 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0625 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5625 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286529903509 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104954856298 0.0743258471296 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124919545697 0.0701772020484 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175866864254 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139330526459 0.0628817314937 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.91 12.5979740519 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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