TPO8: Television advertising directed toward young children (age two to five) should not be allowed.
No one can deny that there are both possitive and negative aspects of television advertising done specifically for children of age two to five. if I were forced to choose, I would definitly suggest no advertising should be done for young children exclusively. it is my firm belief that advertisement made for children can have negative imapct on child, for number of reasons, and I will develop this idea in subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, at this age a child is not fully aware of what is right and wrong. children are gullible at this age and learn whaterver first thing they see in their milleu. The advertising companies may or may not keep this thing in mind and can create any type advertisement, which in turn can have bad influence on child.
I have to mention that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. you see, when I was five years old, I saw an advertisment for candy bar on television. I liked the candy bar from the instance, it touched my toungh for first time. After that, I started throwing tantrums for this candy bar every evening. Many times, my parents tried to persuade me to eat something healthy, but I was stuborn. As a result, they had to buy me that candy bar every now and than. As you can see, if I have'nt seen that advertisment, I would have not developed strong liking for a particular candy bar.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ically for children of age two to five. if I were forced to choose, I would defini...
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...be done for young children exclusively. it is my firm belief that advertisement ma...
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...fully aware of what is right and wrong. children are gullible at this age and learn what...
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...fluenced by my own personal experience. you see, when I was five years old, I saw a...
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... to buy me that candy bar every now and than. As you can see, if I havent seen that ...
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...very now and than. As you can see, if I havent seen that advertisment, I would have no...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1146.0 1977.66487455 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 249.0 407.700716846 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60240963855 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.48103885553 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71358183859 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610441767068 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 361.8 618.680645161 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.3700946801 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1538461538 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1538461538 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92307692308 5.45110844103 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 11.8709677419 25% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.161248302382 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598042301621 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08222688775 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121448866703 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103229198651 0.0645574589148 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 86.8835125448 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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