Parents, if you need a summer camp for your children look no further than Federville Farms. In a recent survey, Federville Farms ranked first in both overall camper satisfaction and in food quality, and second in the variety of outdoor activities. Federvi

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Parents, if you need a summer camp for your children look no further than Federville Farms. In a recent survey, Federville Farms ranked first in both overall camper satisfaction and in food quality, and second in the variety of outdoor activities. Federville Farms has been family owned and operated for over forty years, so you have nothing to worry about when it comes to your child's safety, and it employs more Red Cross certified lifeguards than any other camp in the state. If you seek the best camp experience for your children, Federville Farms is the best choice you can make.

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The author of the article argues that Parents who are looking for a summer camp for their children's shout opt for Federville Farms. To support his argument the author provides the evidence by citing the results of the survey conducted in which the Federville Farms was ranked first in both overall camp satisfaction and in food quality , and second in the variety of outdoor activities .Furthermore the author also adds that the farm is owned and operated by the family for 40 years. The author further goes on to add the lifeguards present in the farm . Though the underlying issue has merit because of a lack of evidence , weak assumptions and vague language the author's argument is unsubstantiated and deeply flawed. Some of the flaws in the authors argument are as follows.

Firstly , the author fails to state the sample size of the survey in which the Federville farms ranked first and second for its facilities. The author also fails to state that when the survey had taken place . A recent survey can also mean that the survey was conducted two days ago or also it can be two years ago . If it is a two years ago survey then the record on today's date can be different . The farm conditions must have changed drastically in two years . For example if the environment conditions for the stay were good two years ago and now there are factories come up in the vicinity of the farm , so this may not be a good indication as the air may be polluted and not recommended for the children.

Secondly , the author links the child's safety with family owned and 40 year operated Federville farm . The author fails by not giving any statistics showing that the ratio of accidents caused to the total number of children visited . The author makes a false assumption . For example if the data was collected and it showed the ratio to be greater then this would weaken the authors claim significantly .

Thirdly , The author also claims that the farm employs more Red Cross certified lifeguards than any other camp in the state . The author again fails to state the reason behind using more Red Cross certified lifeguards than any other camps .

For example if the reason behind having more red cross lifeguards is the danger faced by the children who have been to the farm for the summer camp . This reason would surely weaken the claim of the author.

Finally , even if one considers that the assumptions stated are valid , the argument remains flawed because author has stated no information about the other parameters that are required to rate a farm for its features . The author ahead doesn't even talk about the child safety parameter and the ranking for the parameter in his argument . The author also fails by not using any statistics to prove his claim . Furthermore the author in the last sentence states that if the parents want to seek the best experience for their children , Federvillie farms is the best choice . By saying this the author neglects that the data provided by him is so minimal that it may prove difficult for the parents to take a final decision.

In conclusion , the author presents an interesting but flawed argument . Had the author presented some statistics involving the points the author has made and the additional information mentioned above , the argument would have been persuasive . As it stands however the author's argument is too weak to be true . Hence I remain unconvinced.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2824.0 2260.96107784 125% => OK
No of words: 585.0 441.139720559 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82735042735 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9180050066 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53073851894 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 204.123752495 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.420512820513 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 867.6 705.55239521 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.76447105788 183% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.0158669964 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.857142857 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8928571429 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35714285714 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 43.0 5.25449101796 818% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 6.88822355289 232% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206448510971 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587454887679 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0762260662888 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104530457195 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0803164184152 0.0628817314937 128% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.3799401198 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 28 15
No. of Words: 586 350
No. of Characters: 2756 1500
No. of Different Words: 255 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.92 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.703 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.449 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 188 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 119 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.929 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.735 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.607 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.153 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5