For the past year as part of an effort to broaden our supporter base our Folk on the Air program has allocated less time to traditional American folk music and more time to Latino music and world music In recent months many long term supporters of our sta | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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For the past year, as part of an effort to broaden our supporter base, our Folk on the Air program has allocated less time to traditional American folk music and more time to Latino music and world music. In recent months, many long-term supporters of our station have written to complain about what they describe as the un-American bias of the program. In addition, the local newspaper has published a recent editorial critical of our shift in programming. Therefore, in order to forestall any further adverse publicity for the station and to avoid the loss of additional listener-supporters, we should discontinue our current emphasis on Latino and world music and restore the time devoted to traditional American folk music to its former level

In the part of article above, The conclusion was made to discontinue emphasis on Latino and world music and to restore the time devoted to traditional folk music. The conclusion was reached on basis of complains from many long-term supporters of radio station and local newspaper editorial on the shift of the programming. However, before this conclusion can be evaluated three specific evidences are required.

First of all, There should be the evidence that the long-term supporters complaining about the issue represent the majority of the total radio listeners. In other words, Has proper survey been done to identify the percentage of people having the similar concern. There is possibility the people complaining are just some small group of people expressing their personal opinion. However, this is possible that the people mainly complaining are matured audiences who are less familiar with Latino and world music. If either of these case is true, then the conclusion drawn in the original argument is severely weakened.

Secondly, There should be evidence that the editorial mentioning about the shift in program too has the similar concern about the program aired. In other words, Do they mention that the shift in the programs has caused dissatisfaction to them. There is possibility that they are praising the step as the modern music like Latino and world music could drastically increase audience of the radio station. If these cases are true, the above argument doesn’t hold water.

Finally, There should be proper evidence that mentions American folk music only as an American form of music. In other words, does American folk music represents the entire American music. There is possibility that they could be demanding other different music then all these three. Further more, It is possible different people have their own favorite American music type.

In the conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to too many false assumptions. If the author is able to claim the above mentioned evidence as true and provide other further evidence then this it is possible discontinuing emphasis on Latino and world music and restoring the time devoted to folk music could actually increase the audience of the radio station.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 311, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s possibility the people complaining are just some small group of people expressi...
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Line 3, column 362, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'opinion'.
Suggestion: opinion
... small group of people expressing their personal opinion. However, this is possible that the peo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, first of all, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1916.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 364.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26373626374 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63601728506 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464285714286 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 610.2 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3823754805 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.444444444 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2222222222 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27777777778 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.273259389554 0.218282227539 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902310792462 0.0743258471296 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0903515600664 0.0701772020484 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164477545525 0.128457276422 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646186873497 0.0628817314937 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 98.500998004 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, first of all, in other words

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments