The author concludes that Pirouettes Ballet School is the best dance school for any child. This is suggested because the school has the most intensive program with the teachers teaching in the program having the experience of dancing in reputed ballet companies all over the world. The school also shows the record of its previous students who have become professional dancers in the elite dance companies. However, in order to evaluate the viability of the recommendation given by the author, three questions need to be answered.
Do all children in Elmtown want to learn Ballet? Can someone state with confidence that all the children have same interests and each of them will enjoy dancing? The author assumes that Pirouettes Ballet School should be the obvious choice for any child. However, before making this vague assumption it should be checked whether all the children want to learn Ballet and pursue it as career option. For instance, a child might like sketching or be passionate about badmiton, perhaps admitting the child to Pirouettes Ballet School would make no sense.
Does the fact that dancing at prestigious ballet companies make a dancer a good teacher? An amazing performer, who knows their art well, might not necessarily also be good at teaching. Teaching is all together different skill which gets polished with experience. There are may experts in their field who have expectional achievements, but if you ask them to teach someone thier skill, they might be perplexed and have a hard time passing their learnings to other.
Do all the students enrolling in a dance school want to become professional dancers? Some students might just want to pursue dance as a hobby or pass time. If this is true, being enrolled in a school with most intensive program training their students to become professional dancers associated with biggest dance companies might not be a good choice for those students. For instance, the student is already pursuing an intensive couse of computer engineering and wants to take a dance class just for refreshing herself.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 340 350
No. of Characters: 1699 1500
No. of Different Words: 177 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.294 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.997 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.556 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.499 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.471 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.546 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'careers'?
Suggestion: careers
...n want to learn Ballet and pursue it as career option. For instance, a child might lik...
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Line 7, column 295, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the biggest'.
Suggestion: with the biggest
... become professional dancers associated with biggest dance companies might not be a good cho...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, well, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 2260.96107784 77% => OK
No of words: 340.0 441.139720559 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11470588235 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62726422368 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.529411764706 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.392264598 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.294117647 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.442289211459 0.218282227539 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154576777689 0.0743258471296 208% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116232123703 0.0701772020484 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282413669582 0.128457276422 220% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127570810431 0.0628817314937 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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