Pirouettes Ballet School is the clear choice for any child. Of all the dance schools in Elmtown, Pirouettes has the most intensive program, and our teachers have danced in the most prestigious ballet companies all over the world. Many of our students have gone on to become professional dancers with top dance companies.
The argument makes number of unwarranted assumptions and lacks clear evidence as to how Pirouettes Ballet School should be the top priority to any student. Although, the argument lists down various compelling reasons for the same. However, there are numerous assumptions that must be clarified, and which if left unanswered can render a totally different picture.
Argument suggests that since many of the ex-dancers of ballet academy became professional dancers with top dancing company it should be a good choice for neophytes. However, we have no clue as to the exact ratio of students admitted as a professional dancer. Probably, 6 in 10 of of the last batch made up in big dancing firms. But, that does not ensure that everyone who enters the ballet school will have a high probability of getting into big dance company. Pirouettes must present with exact data as to, how many industry partner they are associated with and what was the ratio and number of ex-students serving currently as a dancer of big firms?.
Argument assumes that people of Elmtown have no other option but to go to Pirouettes. what if there was a Ballet school in nearby town just 5 miles away with even have better teachers, less fees and had curriculum similar to Pirouettes. Students could still travel to the nearby town for probably a better school. We need data as to how many more schools does the town has in its near vicinity. Also, Pirouettes has the most intensive program. We don't really know how much intense the program is. Is the intensity compared and calculated with the likes of other institute in competition?.
Pirouettes has renowned teachers who have been part of some famous ballet companies. But, that does not tell us about the credibility of the ex-dancers as a teacher. Does being a good sportsman make you a good coach? not necessarily. A good dancer might not be a good teacher. We need answers as to how good are these ex-dancers in teaching. Because, if they are not good in teaching students at Pirouettes would not turn out to be good for beginners.
To sum it up, though Pirouettes Ballet school might be an obvious choice for Ballet enthusiasts. However, it is only after we get proper answers and data concerning industry tie-ups, number of ex-students working as professional dancers, credibility of teachers and presence of other notable dance academy in near vicinity, then only one could further analyse the eminence of Pirouettes. Failing to provide answers to these questions renders the argument baseless.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'however', 'if', 'really', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'thus', 'as to']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.24358974359 0.25644967241 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.147435897436 0.15541462614 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.102564102564 0.0836205057962 123% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0555555555556 0.0520304965353 107% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0277777777778 0.0272364105082 102% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123931623932 0.125424944231 99% => OK
Participles: 0.034188034188 0.0416121511921 82% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.72214651716 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0299145299145 0.026700313972 112% => OK
Particles: 0.00641025641026 0.001811407834 354% => OK
Determiners: 0.0811965811966 0.113004496875 72% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0235042735043 0.0255425247493 92% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0277777777778 0.0127820249294 217% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2537.0 2731.13054187 93% => OK
No of words: 425.0 446.07635468 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.96941176471 6.12365571057 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.367058823529 0.378187486979 97% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.28 0.287650121315 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.202352941176 0.208842608468 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.117647058824 0.135150697306 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72214651716 2.79052419416 98% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 207.018472906 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512941176471 0.469332199767 109% => OK
Word variations: 57.8386297878 52.1807786196 111% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.039408867 125% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.2022227129 73% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.5037910233 57.7814097925 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.48 141.986410481 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 23.2022227129 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.4 0.724660767414 55% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 3.58251231527 223% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 45.0 51.9672348444 87% => OK
Elegance: 1.74074074074 1.8405768891 95% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.449795217727 0.441005458295 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0984795417006 0.135418324435 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0685730960166 0.0829849096947 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.456064335001 0.58762219726 78% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.119199484372 0.147661913831 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151637926699 0.193483328276 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0953592186916 0.0970749176394 98% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.267906090394 0.42659136922 63% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.066519231056 0.0774707102158 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291721653721 0.312017818177 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0817519473003 0.0698173142475 117% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.33743842365 144% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.82512315271 145% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 5.36822660099 93% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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