"The population on Balmer Island increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island plans to limit the number of mopeds rented by each of the island's six moped rental companies from 50 per day to 30 per day during the summer season. Last year, the neighboring island of Torseau enforced similar limits on moped rentals and saw a 50 percent reduction in moped accidents. We predict that putting these limits into effect on Balmer Island will result in the same reduction in moped accidents."
The letter claims that by reducing the number of mopeds rented by each of the island’s six moped rental companies to 30 per day during the summer season to reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. To justify this claim it states that its neighbouring island of Torseau enforced a similar limit and saw moped accidents reduced by 50 percent. This claim fails to mention several key factors and conveys a distorted view of the situation. The assumptions fail to mention several key factors and therefore the argument is unconvincing.
First, the argument readily assumes that Balmer Island is similar to its neighbouring island, Torseau. There are no details provided to justify this assumption. Even if it is the same, there could be a possibility that people over there do not preferring driving mopeds much due to harsh weather conditions. Without supported evidence on this, the claim seems to be unconvincing.
Second, the arguments states that by cutting down on the at each moped rental, there will be a decrease in accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. There could be a possibility that the moped drivers are driving by following all the rules and that the pedestrians are at fault since they cross the road without waiting for the signal to turn red. The argument would have been considerably strengthened if this point was taken into consideration and proper details been provided on this.
Finally, the argument unfairly infers that the mopeds should be reduced to 30 per day. This number is not backed by any data. There is also no evidence that shows whether the reduction will bring about any considerable change or has this idea been implemented before suggesting that it would work. There could be other possible solutions to this problem as well such as implementing a time period during which people can drive mopeds or conducting awareness campaigns that make people realize about the effects of such accidents. Without answers to these, one is left with an impression that the claims are more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.
The conclusion is flawed for the above mentioned reasons and is therefore unconvincing. Had the author presented evidence to back the assumptions and claims, the argument wold have been better reasoned.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 377 350
No. of Characters: 1893 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.406 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.021 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.669 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.944 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.144 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.288 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.477 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.048 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 141, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...d rental companies to 30 per day during the summer season to reduce the number of accidents invol...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, if, second, so, then, therefore, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14854111406 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76380353773 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533156498674 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 591.3 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.1934508175 57.8364921388 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.833333333 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9444444444 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237214693181 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714006463402 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112198877323 0.0701772020484 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123934504752 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105542886613 0.0628817314937 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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