"In many countries it is now possible to turn on the television and view government at work.
Watching these proceedings can help people understand the issues that affect their lives. The
more kinds of government proceedings---trials, debates, meetings, etc.---that are televised,
the more society will benefit."
I strongly agree with the fact that watching proceedings on the television can help many people understand the several issues that bring about a change to their lives. However, I disagree with the notion that the more kinds of governmental proceedings that are televised, the more our society will benefit no matter what the proceeding is related to. In some cases, televised proceedings can prove to be detrimental to the society as a whole.
Watching the televised governmental proceeding has an advantage over reading them in the newspaper or hearing about it on the radio even though these will be accurate. It gives a person an insight on the person’s body language or how the procedures take place in actual reality. An example that can be considered here is one in which these televised proceedings are broadcasted for people in the village areas to see. They can witness the perspective of how the government functions and the many factors they consider for the benefit of them and the society.
Nevertheless, the more such types of proceedings are televised they can cause a harmful result in some cases. Consider the example of a proceeding taking place which is focused on curbing the license of arms to curtail the growing act of terrorism in the country In case the government decides to act against stand that the people take, they can cause a backslash and start protesting on the roads since they are concerned for their safety and will go to any length to make sure that their demand is fulfilled. This is in turn harmful for the country and also reduces their long reputable standing in the world among other countries.
The second reason why I disagree with the statement is that if people watch their elected government members and leaders fighting during the proceeding, they will lose trust in them and worry about how the very people they elected will help secure their future.
In sum, televised proceedings do help people understand the very things that take place during one it should also be noted that televising more of such proceedings carry certain risks that should not be ignored.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: AGREE_WITH_THE_FACT[1]
Message: Use simply 'agree that'.
Suggestion: agree that
I strongly agree with the fact that watching proceedings on the television ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, nevertheless, second, so, as to, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1774.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 359.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94150417827 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64878341296 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490250696379 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.6028236848 60.3974514979 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.833333333 118.986275619 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.9166666667 23.4991977007 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41666666667 5.21951772744 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311095915946 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121958282658 0.0831039109588 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699224412271 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175118564008 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539865677261 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.1392134831 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.