At present Mason City residents seldom use the nearby Mason River for any kind of recreational activity even though surveys of the region s residents consistently rank water sports swimming fishing and boating as a favorite form of recreation Since there | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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“At present, Mason City residents seldom use the nearby Mason River for any kind of recreational activity, even though surveys of the region’s residents consistently rank water sports (swimming, fishing, and boating) as a favorite form of recreation. Since there have been complaints about the quality of the water in the river, residents must be avoiding the river because they think that it is not clean enough. But that situation is about to change: the agency responsible for rivers in our region has announced plans to clean up Mason River. Therefore, recreational use of the river is likely to increase, so the Mason City council will need to increase its budget for improvements to the publicly owned lands along the Mason River.”

The argument above mentions that, despite that the Mason river is rarely used and has complaints about its smell and quality of water, the Manson City residents ranked water sports among their favorite recreational activities. By deciding by the state to clean up the Manson river, the city government should devote more money to riverside recreational facilities. However, it is easy to see that the argument suffer from several fallacies in its assumption.
To begin with, the argument mentions that Manson City residents rank water sports among their favorite recreational activities but that ranking is based on how many residents. It is not specifiy in the argument. In addition, the river, where those water sports are done, is rarely used but by this, it means that fewer people have vote for water sports.
Moreover, the argument mentions that in repsonse of the many complaints about the Manson River, the state will clean up the river and therefore, the watersport will increase in popularity. These are not two facts linked directly together, because cleaning the river doesn't mean that people will directly swim or boating or fish. Thus, it doesn't inferred that the riverside recreational facilities will increase.
Last but not least, the argument mentions that the city parkl department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities but this is irrelevant. Indeed, why should the city park department devotes more money of its budget to water activities. The aim of a department is to attract more residents of the city in their field, in this case parks, and not providing enough money to clean up the Manson river.
Overall, the argument is far from forceful enough to persuade that just by devoting more money on clean up the Manson river, people will get more attract for water sports and hence, increase the riverside recreational facilities.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, in addition, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 307.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18892508143 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62566579986 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 138.0 204.123752495 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.449511400651 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 496.8 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.690197947 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.538461538 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6153846154 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30769230769 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25045835729 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0957241099789 0.0743258471296 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827435269908 0.0701772020484 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156356115493 0.128457276422 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0732318917099 0.0628817314937 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, thus, in addition, to begin with

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