The president of Grove College has recommended that the college abandon its century-old tradition of all-female education and begin admitting men. Pointing to other all-female colleges that experienced an increase in applications after adopting coeducation, the president argues that coeducation would lead to a significant increase in applications and enrollment. However, the director of the alumnae association opposes the plan. Arguing that all-female education is essential to the very identity of the college, the director cites annual surveys of incoming students in which these students say that the school's all-female status was the primary reason they selected Grove. The director also points to a survey of Grove alumnae in which a majority of respondents strongly favored keeping the college all female.
The president and administrative staff of Grove College suggests that the college should remain all-female and it should not adopt co-education. This assertion has been made to maintain the financial funding from alumni, based on a survey conducted among students and alumni. However, before reaching any such conclusion, below three questions need to be answered.
Firstly, the survey conducted among faculty members shows that they are in favor of coeducation. In their perspective, it will increase enrollment. Although, do we have data of approximately what percentage of enrollment will increase if the college education system is changed to coeducation along with a juxtaposed comparison of current enrollment and expected enrollment after the change? If not, then a study needs to be conducted to check if this argument holds water. This comparison will lead to a lucid view in determining whether the expected increment in enrollment due to the change in century-old tradition of all female education will lead to any significant contribution in college's finances. Because, if that is not the case, and the financial gains are negligible, then there will be no benefit by admitting men.
Further, are results obtained from the survey conducted among students and alumnae in sync with the students who are willing to enroll once the college opt for co-education? This comparison is essential before making the decision, because, if the students who are willing to enroll in the future due to coeducation is higher, then it will be beneficial for the college. As the current numbers of already enrolled students may be on the lower side leading to weak finances. For example, if there are 1400 new men admitted after the college's structure is changed to co-education, whereas, only 800 students left the college or opted for other college because their priority was to study in an all women structure. In such a situation, Grove college will still have 600 more admissions than the previous year. Hence, results of this survey on students willing to enroll might significantly weaken the administrative staff's argument.
Lastly, is percentage contribution of the current financial aid by alumnae of Grove College is a huge amount? This analysis will impact the decision whether the survey conducted amongst the alumnae should be given as much weightage as it is currently given, or not. This data of alumnae's contribution to the college financially, needs to be compared with the expected increase in financial aid, by expected ballooned enrollments after adopting coeducation. If the contribution made by alumnae is lower as compared to the financial gain colleges receive after implementing coeducation, then it will be a clear win-win situation and the survey conducted among alumnae can be disregarded. For instance, if the alumnae contribution towards the college's funds is only 10 percent of the total, and rest of the funding comes from either tuition fees or financial aid provided by the government, then their is no point in giving so much weightage to survey conducted among alumnae.
Although the survey conducted by the administrative staff seems to be contributing to the argument. But, before reaching to a conclusion, all the above questions need to be answered and data should be presented (preferably in the form of systematic study). After that, we can reach a rigid decision, otherwise it can negatively impact college's finances.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 551 350
No. of Characters: 2851 1500
No. of Different Words: 231 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.845 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.174 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.899 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 217 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 182 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 130 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 87 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.957 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.11 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.609 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 371, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... it will be beneficial for the college. As the current numbers of already enrolled...
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Line 5, column 914, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'staffs'' or 'staff's'?
Suggestion: staffs'; staff's
...significantly weaken the administrative staffs argument. Lastly, is percentage cont...
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Line 7, column 503, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...e contribution made by alumnae is lower as compared to the financial gain colleges...
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Line 7, column 894, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...al aid provided by the government, then their is no point in giving so much weightage...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e to survey conducted among alumnae. Although the survey conducted by the administrat...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, lastly, may, so, still, then, whereas, as to, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 55.5748502994 144% => OK
Nominalization: 31.0 16.3942115768 189% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2915.0 2260.96107784 129% => OK
No of words: 551.0 441.139720559 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29038112523 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84493438435 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97794878374 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.442831215971 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 915.3 705.55239521 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 11.0 2.70958083832 406% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.9824659638 57.8364921388 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.739130435 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9565217391 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86956521739 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237636499142 0.218282227539 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0730272999464 0.0743258471296 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.087042387358 0.0701772020484 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145222232612 0.128457276422 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433746976455 0.0628817314937 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 98.500998004 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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