Prompt: “The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants. ‘Recently, butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. This change, however, has had little impact on our customers. In fact, only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers cannot distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine. Thus, to avoid the expense of purchasing butter and to increase profitability, the Happy Pancake House should extend this cost-saving change to its restaurants in the southeast and northeast as well.
The memo in which manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants wants to increase profits by extending the idea of replacing butter by margarine in his all restaurants in the southeast and northeast as well. The assumption his made is illogical and baseless. He did not do more research about the idea he taken. There are some fallacies.
Firstly, the survey he did that customers have complained , indicating that an average 98 people out of 100 are happy with change, this assumption underlies by the claim that they may just like to happy because there are no more restaurants than Happy Pancake house that they bought some butter or margarine. For example, if there, someone open a new restaurant where butter or margarine is available, then may some customer go to the new shop who pretends to be happy to the Pancake House.
Additionally, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead if they know about the fact that they are different, that yet they don’t understand the taste of it, then the customers never go to the Pancake House and the restaurant must go to lose the revenue.
Furthermore, without research of people in the northeast: what they want from restaurant either butter or margarine, the assumption underlies the claim that their profits will dramatically increase. As the people of northeast are different from the southeast in the taste of migraine.
In the conclusion, the business manager must do further research in the people and the place of southeast and northeast for make a profit dramatically. He may be a good businessman, if he do the survey in the right way, and he give the knowledge to customers of butter and margarine, whether they want a butter or margarine and did as what customers want.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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flaws:
No. of Words: 310 350 //more content wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 310 350
No. of Characters: 1468 1500
No. of Different Words: 142 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.196 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.735 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.65 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 96 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.182 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.293 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.389 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.667 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.166 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 79, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cake House restaurants wants to increase profits by extending the idea of replaci...
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Line 1, column 285, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd baseless. He did not do more research about the idea he taken. There are some ...
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Line 3, column 20, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e some fallacies. Firstly, the survey he did that customers have complained , ...
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Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...y he did that customers have complained , indicating that an average 98 people ou...
^^
Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...argarine. For example, if there, someone open a new restaurant where butter or ma...
^^
Line 5, column 141, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...in when they are given margarine instead if they know about the fact that they ...
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Line 5, column 145, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hen they are given margarine instead if they know about the fact that they are ...
^^
Line 5, column 151, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ey are given margarine instead if they know about the fact that they are differ...
^^
Line 7, column 200, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eir profits will dramatically increase. As the people of northeast are different ...
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Line 7, column 240, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...As the people of northeast are different from the southeast in the taste of migra...
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Line 9, column 189, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...ly. He may be a good businessman, if he do the survey in the right way, and he gi...
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Line 9, column 202, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a good businessman, if he do the survey in the right way, and he give the knowle...
^^
Line 9, column 229, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'gives'.
Suggestion: gives
...do the survey in the right way, and he give the knowledge to customers of butter an...
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Line 9, column 298, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rs of butter and margarine, whether they want a butter or margarine and did as wh...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, so, then, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1519.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 309.0 441.139720559 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91585760518 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76688647581 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462783171521 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 705.55239521 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.9448608314 57.8364921388 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.090909091 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0909090909 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.36363636364 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230010256019 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0819421686862 0.0743258471296 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0858707783552 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128764611181 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0668214001547 0.0628817314937 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.48 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 98.500998004 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.