The president of Grove College has recommended that the college abandon its century-old tradition of all-female education and begin admitting men. Pointing to other all-female colleges that experienced an increase in applications after adopting coeducation, the president argues that coeducation would lead to a significant increase in applications and enrollment. However, the director of the alumnae association opposes the plan. Arguing that all-female education is essential to the very identity of the college, the director cites annual surveys of incoming students in which these students say that the school's all-female status was the primary reason they selected Grove. The director also points to a survey of Grove alumnae in which a majority of respondents strongly favored keeping the college all female.
The argument in which the president of Grove College has recommended that the college abandon its century-old tradition of all –female education and begin admitting men and the director of the alumnae association opposes the plan is rife with holes and assumptions, and thus, not strong enough to take a conclusion.
The college which have century-old tradition of all-female education, which have its own reputation till now by the alumnae, as, time changes, male and the female are the same, they may have the equal right to study in the college and the status of the college must increase by the alumni. As, this assumption claims the school all female status was the primary reason they selected Grove.
Additionally, the alumnae have no more critical thinking about the enrollment and the advantages of having the male and female students in the same college. For example, after completing the graduation, female must face the male competitors were they with them in the same post for job or in any research. At that time, they may not fully capable of circumstances around them with opposite gender.
Furthermore, may the director of alumnae is personally oppose the president for his personal benefit for the post of the president, and the survey of Grove alumnae in which a majority of respondents strongly favored keeping the college all female is one of the game he playing for the post.
In the conclusion, whether the college is all-female or both male and female, the president must take a time and do further work for begin admitting men. So, the college will have more good status in the future and the more increase in the enrollment that increases the profit of the college.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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Correct arguments:
argument 1:
all-female education is essential to the very identity of the college,
argument 2:
the director cites annual surveys of incoming students in which these students say that the school's all-female status was the primary reason they selected Grove.
argument 3:
The director also points to a survey of Grove alumnae in which a majority of respondents strongly favored keeping the college all female.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 286 350
No. of Characters: 1375 1500
No. of Different Words: 133 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.112 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.808 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.575 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 97 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.778 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.943 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.464 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.749 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.203 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 290, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...he college must increase by the alumni. As, this assumption claims the school all ...
^^
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...udents in the same college. For example, after completing the graduation, female ...
^^
Line 3, column 220, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pleting the graduation, female must face the male competitors were they with them...
^^
Line 4, column 56, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'opposed'.
Suggestion: opposed
...y the director of alumnae is personally oppose the president for his personal benefit ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, may, so, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.6327345309 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1416.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 286.0 441.139720559 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95104895105 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66526239779 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 204.123752495 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48951048951 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 457.2 705.55239521 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.1651453544 57.8364921388 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.333333333 119.503703932 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7777777778 23.324526521 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.394917883926 0.218282227539 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165549337384 0.0743258471296 223% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.139363818627 0.0701772020484 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245194695686 0.128457276422 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140628995839 0.0628817314937 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.3799401198 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 48.3550499002 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.65 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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