The president of Grove College has recommended that the college abandon its century-old tradition of all-female education and begin admitting men. Pointing to other all-female colleges that experienced an increase in applications after adopting coeducation, the president argues that coeducation would lead to a significant increase in applications and enrollment. However, the director of the alumnae association opposes the plan. Arguing that all-female education is essential to the very identity of the college, the director cites annual surveys of incoming students in which these students say that the school's all-female status was the primary reason they selected Grove. The director also points to a survey of Grove alumnae in which a majority of respondents strongly favored keeping the college all female.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The president and director of the alumnae association at Grove College disagree on the subject of the school admitting students gender. The president argued that in order to increase the enrollment, the school should open its door for both genders instead of just female students. On the other hand, the director opposes this recommendation due to many surveys from incoming students and alumnae. However, both of them need to answer the following questions in order to make the recommendation and the argument which it bases on reasonable.
The president assumed that since other all-female colleges experience increase of enrollment after adopting coeducation, Grove College is able as well. Here, we need to ask how many all-females colleges that changed to coeducation system have had an increase in enrollment. What if there are 10 all-female colleges adopting the new system and only 2 of them have increased in enrollment? We do not have the answer to this question for us to evaluate the president’s recommendation.
Another question we need to ask is who did the survey for the incoming students. What if the survey was done by the director himself? It is entirely possible that the director only ask students who he knew would stand by his side. If this is the case, then we cannot for sure know if the survey can honestly reflects the feeling of the incoming students. Or, perhaps, the survey pool was not a sufficient size. What if the survey was only sent to 10 incoming students and there are 1000 incoming students? That is only 1% of the total students’ voice which is obviously not enough.
The director of the alumnae association also mentions that the survey from alumnae shows strong favored in keeping the college all female. Again, we need to ask: Who did the survey? Is the survey conducted fairly and reasonably? We need more information about these survey in order to decide whether if the argument to oppose the plan of the president is reasonable.
Yet, even if the survey of alumnae was conducted fairly, we need to ask if the future students enjoy the same features of a school than the students in the past? It is possible that the alumnae who answered the survey were all graduated decades ago and they prefer all-females schools due to gender inequality during the time they went to school. The students nowadays do not have to worry about gender inequality, and therefore they prefer schools with coeducation system. Here, again, we do not have enough of information to answer the questions above for us to evaluate the argument.
The director of the alumnae association at Grove College needs to answer the above questions in order to strengthen his argument.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 455 350
No. of Characters: 2193 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.619 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.82 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.628 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 121 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.958 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.003 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.458 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.567 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.212 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 89, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...urvey for the incoming students. What if the survey was done by the director hims...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, honestly, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2268.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 455.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98461538462 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61852021839 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76591813029 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430769230769 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 710.1 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7548182782 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9583333333 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04166666667 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205232721616 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675126050825 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106548678046 0.0701772020484 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129450126318 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12783796542 0.0628817314937 203% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.32208582834 89% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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