While students’ side presents an intriguing case in their petition, unfortunately their assumptions have perfunctory reasoning for support. In the following, I call upon three main point that the writer has been reticent about and must be looked into.
For starts, the writer claims that the low post-graduation employment rates of Classen students is solely to be blamed upon the curriculum. Yet they fail to explore other possible reasons for unemployment. The simplest of which is socio-economic instability or an ongoing period of recession, in such times employment is fraught with difficulties and more experienced candidates may often be preferred. Also geographical factor must be taken into account. It may that the observed universities are placed adjacent to within more industrial cities, where the demand for fresh workforce is insatiable.
Also the students boldly compare job placement rate of their respective university with that of” many top-ranked universities”. Two disturbing ambiguity in the claim must be addressed: first, in Classen university’s overall ranking comparable to the other mentioned universities? Secondly, was the fields of studies in the other university graduates taken into account? If the mentioned institution ranks below 100, comparing its post-graduates’ immediate achievements with high ranking universities is ipso facto asinine. Moreover, the fields of studies are as well important; generally students majored in art has much more trouble landing a job compared to a STEM graduate.
Lastly, the writer relegates the role of higher education to job preparation boot camp. Goals for attaining a degree may differ for each individual, but in any case having wider and more varied understanding of the world is beneficial both to future professionals as well as those who strive for scholastic excellence. Thus this argument lacks sound reasoning on many facet and must be further investigated.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 295 350
No. of Characters: 1610 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.144 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.458 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.075 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 119 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 58 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.345 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.308 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.04 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 301, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'times'' or 'time's'?
Suggestion: times'; time's
...an ongoing period of recession, in such times employment is fraught with difficulties...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 403, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...nced candidates may often be preferred. Also geographical factor must be taken into ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...and for fresh workforce is insatiable. Also the students boldly compare job placeme...
^^^^
Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: '“' seems to be missing
...their respective university with that of” many top-ranked universities”. Two dist...
^
Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: EN_UNPAIRED_BRACKETS
Message: Unpaired symbol: '“' seems to be missing
...th that of” many top-ranked universities”. Two disturbing ambiguity in the claim ...
^
Line 4, column 264, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...beneficial both to future professionals as well as those who strive for scholastic excelle...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 319, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...e who strive for scholastic excellence. Thus this argument lacks sound reasoning on ...
^^^^
Line 4, column 363, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun facet seems to be countable; consider using: 'many facets'.
Suggestion: many facets
... this argument lacks sound reasoning on many facet and must be further investigated.
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, lastly, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, while, as well as, in any case
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1660.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 295.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62711864407 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25044977331 2.78398813304 117% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.654237288136 0.468620217663 140% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.407183352 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.666666667 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 5.70786347227 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253160846628 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782649763251 0.0743258471296 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699104462146 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136689910097 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0408460019776 0.0628817314937 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.2 8.32208582834 123% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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