There are undoubtedly many youngsters from poor backgrounds whom, despite being gifted, are deprived from pursuing higher education so by implementing a plan to sponsor such youth the very first benefit of it would be offering opportunities to children of indigent families that would otherwise be deemed unreachable to them.
The extension of this opportunity will consequently motivate these children to strive for a better education, one that could open more door in the professional world for them. Although we’re all cognizant of the fact that having a university degree doesn’t necessarily land us a job, but it obviously elevates our chances of having better ones. The most immediate impact of this on the society would be helping these children out of poverty. We’ve all heard the term “ do not give someone a fish, teach them fishing”, well in this scenario, better educated people have a higher chance of getting jobs with higher pay grade or even running a successful business thus doing so helping their situation more effectively than any relief plan. This will not however serve as a panacea against class discrimination but will be a maverick head start.
Naturally, some may argue that student loans are already available for such circumstances but it is paramount to note that these loans come at a great price for the receiver. Those who graduate university with the shadow of their loans following them, their social and financial growth may be seriously impeded by the weight of these loans, especially when they attempt to take another loan, for example a mortgage; being already under debt to another financial institution would most likely subject them to higher interest rate on the mortgage, only deepening the financial schism between them and others who started their career with a clean slate.
Lastly, should someone criticize this idea for the strain it would put on governmental budgeting, it would be justified to retort that by doing this there will be more people in the higher income bracket therefore in the long run government tax revenue will increase.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 23, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun youngster seems to be countable; consider using: 'many youngsters'.
Suggestion: many youngsters
There are undoubtedly many youngster from poor backgrounds whom, despite bei...
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Line 1, column 28, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'youngsters'?
Suggestion: youngsters
There are undoubtedly many youngster from poor backgrounds whom, despite bei...
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Line 2, column 412, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...of this on the society would be helping this children out of poverty. We’ve all hear...
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Line 2, column 516, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...give someone a fish, teach them fishing” , well in this scenario, better educated ...
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Line 3, column 101, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'be'
Suggestion: be
...ilable for such circumstances but we it is paramount to note that these loans come...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, however, if, lastly, may, so, therefore, thus, well, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1763.0 2235.4752809 79% => OK
No of words: 344.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.125 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68834915367 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622093023256 0.4932671777 126% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 704.065955056 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.2370786517 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 23.0359550562 165% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 114.825471429 60.3974514979 190% => OK
Chars per sentence: 195.888888889 118.986275619 165% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.2222222222 23.4991977007 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 5.21951772744 192% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0813735362635 0.243740707755 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0314394972037 0.0831039109588 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0220681372135 0.0758088955206 29% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0469795503718 0.150359130593 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229327973437 0.0667264976115 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.8 14.1392134831 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.91 48.8420337079 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 12.1743820225 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.8971910112 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.2143820225 153% => OK
text_standard: 22.0 11.7820224719 187% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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