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Over the past two years , the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarders has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store Owner believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboarders users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarders in central plaza. If skate boarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The store owner of central plaza makes the recommendation for the city to prohibit skateboarding within the plaza to restore business that has been declining in the past two years. he argues that not only has business decreased, but there has been an increase in litter and vandalism as well. The argument, however, fails to take into account other factors that may be contributing to decreased business. it also makes the assumption that increased litter and vandalism are the skateboarders responsibility.
The store owner claims that there has been a decrease in business, yet an increase in skateboarding at the plaza, therefore business would return to its "previously high levels" with a ban on skateboarding. however, a decrease in business may be due to many other factors. central plaza may have a variety of stores that no longer are relevant for today's shoppers. With an increase in technology offering new and improved methods of viewing media, stores such as books shops, video rentals, and photo developing booths no longer are in as high a demand. businesses, such as these, are experiencing a decline in sales because of becoming outdated, not because of the presence of skateboarders outside the store front. By removing skateboarders from the plaza, these stores would not be able to expect a return of business.
The store owner also makes the assumption that a decline in business is not because of increase in local competition. central plaza may be in a town experiencing rapid commercial growth. perhaps a new plaza has been constructed down the road, or a new shopping mall has been built a short drive away. An increase in competition could be reason for a decrease in business. skateboarders in a plaza surely would not be a determining factor in choosing a store if that store is not matching a competitors prices or variety of goods. In this instance, removing skateboarders from the plaza would again not help to bring back business.
Lastly, the store owner assumes the skateboarders are the perpetrators of littering and vandalism. perhaps there is a lack of nighttime security making it easy for anyone to cause destruction to the plaza. perhaps there aren't an adequate number of trash receptacles available for easy trash disposal. it is possible the hired janitorial service is overwhelmed or undermotivated causing a build-up of litter. An increase in litter and vandalism cannot justly be blamed on the increase of skateboarders.
The store owner may be justified in his concerns of a decline in business, however he is mistaken in believing simply prohibiting skateboarding within the plaza would bring business back to high levels. He must address many of the variables as cause for a decline in business.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 453 350
No. of Characters: 2247 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.613 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.96 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.954 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 159 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 126 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.367 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.44 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.687 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.151 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 182, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s been declining in the past two years. he argues that not only has business dec...
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Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...been declining in the past two years. he argues that not only has business decre...
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Line 1, column 410, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...be contributing to decreased business. it also makes the assumption that increase...
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Line 1, column 483, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'skateboarders'' or 'skateboarder's'?
Suggestion: skateboarders'; skateboarder's
... increased litter and vandalism are the skateboarders responsibility. The store owner c...
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Line 1, column 513, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...m are the skateboarders responsibility. The store owner claims that there has be...
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Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...els' with a ban on skateboarding. however, a decrease in business may be due to m...
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Line 3, column 286, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Central
...ness may be due to many other factors. central plaza may have a variety of stores that...
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Line 3, column 569, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Businesses
...ths no longer are in as high a demand. businesses, such as these, are experiencing a decl...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e able to expect a return of business. The store owner also makes the assumptio...
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Line 5, column 119, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Central
...cause of increase in local competition. central plaza may be in a town experiencing rap...
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Line 5, column 189, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
... experiencing rapid commercial growth. perhaps a new plaza has been constructed down t...
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Line 5, column 376, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Skateboarders
... be reason for a decrease in business. skateboarders in a plaza surely would not be a determ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gain not help to bring back business. Lastly, the store owner assumes the skat...
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Line 7, column 101, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...rpetrators of littering and vandalism. perhaps there is a lack of nighttime security m...
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Line 7, column 209, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...one to cause destruction to the plaza. perhaps there arent an adequate number of trash...
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Line 7, column 223, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...estruction to the plaza. perhaps there arent an adequate number of trash receptacles...
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Line 7, column 305, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...les available for easy trash disposal. it is possible the hired janitorial servic...
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Line 7, column 507, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lamed on the increase of skateboarders. The store owner may be justified in his ...
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Line 9, column 279, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...les as cause for a decline in business.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, lastly, may, so, therefore, well, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2318.0 2260.96107784 103% => OK
No of words: 452.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12831858407 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08249601114 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446902654867 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7376486983 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.782608696 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.652173913 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.82608695652 5.70786347227 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.25449101796 362% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333290777229 0.218282227539 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101350927228 0.0743258471296 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703884989287 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203599186177 0.128457276422 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0775944337941 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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