Recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant reduction in the species population. With the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. Nonetheless, the population should not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. Because this trend is expected to continue over the next several years, the Madagascan shrimp will quickly become an endangered species.
Living organisms have their own ways of dealing against adverse conditions, might be sometimes they perish in trying to deal with adverse conditions, chances are they remain unaffected by building resilience and adapting to the new surroundings and conditions.
The first assumption the author takes regarding the decrease in shrimp population is due to the recent incursions by deep sea fishermen, might be invalid. There are huge number of reasons that can be present for their reduction in number, might be due to a new offshore oil drill which due to its toxic emissions might be killing the shrimps. Reduction in population of shrimps can also be accounted for the change in weather due to global warming making the conditions and milieu inhabitable for the shrimps. If proper steps are taken by the oil drill to deal with the toxic emissions, there is a chance that the population of the Madagascan shrimps return back to the way it was before.
Due to the above mentioned pollution problems these shrimps might migrate from their current habitat in response to the adverse conditions, thus they might have good chances of multiplying their population. They might even delay the breeding season until the conditions are right for their offsprings, thus the population might not decrease as the author pointed out.
Increase in water pollution might lead to shrimps carrying various diseases which when human being consumes might be fatal, which in turn leads the fishermen to stop fishing for Madagascan shrimps, thus not decreasing their population due to over fishing.
All the reasons accounted above can lead to population of Madagascan shrimps to remain unaffected, thus never coming to a point where they become endangered species.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 283 350
No. of Characters: 1438 1500
No. of Different Words: 143 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.102 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.081 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.592 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 105 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.444 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.479 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.778 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.468 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.763 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.146 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 652, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
...he population of the Madagascan shrimps return back to the way it was before. Due to the...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, regarding, so, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 55.5748502994 79% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1473.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 283.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20494699647 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67547874548 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52296819788 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 705.55239521 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 19.7664670659 46% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.8329662244 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 163.666666667 119.503703932 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.4444444444 23.324526521 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.70786347227 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14956417679 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765698759333 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442802225419 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.079351060984 0.128457276422 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0403813616329 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.8 14.3799401198 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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