Recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant reduction in the species population. With the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. Nonetheless, the population should not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. Because this trend is expected to continue over the next several years, the Madagascan shrimp will quickly become an endangered species.
The author states a claim about a shrimp which is going to be quickly endangered species. Here he talks about a situation where the incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant population. And now that the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. But he warns the population to not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived, as the trend is expected to continue over the next several years which results in the extinction of this species.
The most common reason to the extinction of different marine species is the increased levels of sea food consumption. Due to this, fishermen are increasing their hunt in the deep sea also. Although, in the breeding season the number of species increase te number will not be up to the mark. The recent study by some country states that soon many different species in sea water are going to be extinct due to inhuman activities. Humans have to stop such activities and decrease their sea food consumption levels.
Though the fact that doctors suggest to have fish for the betterment of our health we should do that in limit. The author provides evidence in his statement that Madagascan shrimp is detroiting because of incursions by deep-sea fisherman. All the fisherman should also be aware of the result of such cruel activities. Occupations such as fishing should be avuncular and they must look for some other primary occupations for the purpose of their living.
We know the fact that sea and ocean comprise of certain scavengers which help and make the water fresh and clean by consuming the dead species inside the water. The incursions by deep sea-fishermen into the habitats of such species could result in scavengers extinction also. Hence fishermen should acknowledge this fact, and stop these kind of activities.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 315 350
No. of Characters: 1538 1500
No. of Different Words: 155 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.213 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.883 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.595 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.688 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.222 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.534 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 184, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...e increasing their hunt in the deep sea also. Although, in the breeding season the n...
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Line 5, column 190, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...easing their hunt in the deep sea also. Although, in the breeding season the number of s...
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Line 5, column 342, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... study by some country states that soon many different species in sea water are going to be ex...
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Line 9, column 30, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggest having'.
Suggestion: suggest having
...vels. Though the fact that doctors suggest to have fish for the betterment of our health w...
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Line 13, column 37, Rule ID: COMPRISE_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprise' or 'consist of'?
Suggestion: comprise; consist of
... We know the fact that sea and ocean comprise of certain scavengers which help and make ...
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Line 13, column 271, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...s could result in scavengers extinction also. Hence fishermen should acknowledge thi...
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Line 13, column 277, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...d result in scavengers extinction also. Hence fishermen should acknowledge this fact,...
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Line 13, column 332, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
... should acknowledge this fact, and stop these kind of activities.
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Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t, and stop these kind of activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, look, so, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1583.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 315.0 441.139720559 71% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0253968254 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66380042485 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.511111111111 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.3963570019 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.9375 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6875 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.378420752011 0.218282227539 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125124614573 0.0743258471296 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.130022827079 0.0701772020484 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.214729656171 0.128457276422 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107113794662 0.0628817314937 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.3799401198 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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