A recent sales study indicated that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent over the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants that specialize in seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about eating healthily. Therefore, a new Bay City restaurant specializing in seafood will be quite popular and profitable.
The argument claims that the consumption of seafood dishes in baycity increases 30 percent in
last five years and people of the city tends to more like restaurant seafood, so the Captain
seafood restaurant open in the city than it become a popular and profitable. Stated in this way
the argument fails to mention several key points bases on which it could be evaluate. The
conclusion relies on assumption for which there is no better evidence. Hence the argument can
be unsubstantiated and unsupported. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals the
little credible support for the author's argument.
First of all, the argument claims that the consumption of seafood dishes in Bay city
restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently
operating city restaurants whose speciality in seafood. This is a merely an assumption without
much solid ground. For example, here the argument stated that 30 percent seafood in Bay city
restaurant increased during last five years. Here, the author not provide a absolute value of
how many seafood dishes increase. It may be possible people like same type of seafood and this
dishes are increased. so, the argument does not said that all seafood dishes 30 percent
increases.
Second, the argument cites that the majority in Baycity are two-income families, and a
nationalwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cookes meals that
they decade ago. This is again weak and unsupported claim as a the argument does not
demonstrate any statistical data about the two-income families also the argument directly
assumes that decades ago this family eat more home-cookes meals. Without the evidence argument
stated that majority in Baycity are two-income families that is more wishful. Also the argument
stated that the this people are more concern about healthful eating. So implicitly argument
assumes that the seafood in restaurants are more healthful rather than home made cookes also
some restaurant provide a good seafood. so, these are assumptions that does not convince to the
reader appropriatly.
Lastly, the argument readily assumes that the new Captain seafood restaurant that specialize in
seafood should be quite popular and profitable. This argument readily assumes that if open the
Captain seafood restaurant in Bay city than people will like it's quality and people always
come to eat good seafood in this restaurant and consequently profit is increase. This is again
weak assumption that is predict popularity of this restaurant without much evidence. However,
careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals liitle credible support of the author's argument with
respect to several critical points and raises a several skeptical questions. Without answer of
this questions the reader left with the impression that the claims made by the author are more
wishful rather than substantive.
In conclusion, the author's conclusion is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolter it further the
author must provide better concrete evidence. It considerably strengthed if the author mentions
all relevant facts. In order to asses the merit of sevaral situation it is essential have a
depth knowledge about it contributing factors. As a result, the author's conclusion has a not
legs to stands.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The argument claims that the consumption of seafood dishes in baycity increases 30 percent in last five years and people of the city tends to more like restaurant seafood, so the Captain seafood restaurant open in the city than it become a popular and profitable.
Error: baycity Suggestion: baying
Sentence: Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose speciality in seafood.
Error: speciality Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Second, the argument cites that the majority in Baycity are two-income families, and a nationalwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cookes meals that they decade ago.
Error: nationalwide Suggestion: nationalize
Error: home-cookes Suggestion: home cooked
Sentence: So implicitly argument assumes that the seafood in restaurants are more healthful rather than home made cookes also some restaurant provide a good seafood. so, these are assumptions that does not convince to the reader appropriatly.
Error: appropriatly Suggestion: appropriately
Sentence: However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals liitle credible support of the author's argument with respect to several critical points and raises a several skeptical questions.
Error: liitle Suggestion: little
Sentence: To bolter it further the author must provide better concrete evidence.
Error: bolter Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: It considerably strengthed if the author mentions all relevant facts.
Error: strengthed Suggestion: strengthen
Sentence: In order to asses the merit of sevaral situation it is essential have a depth knowledge about it contributing factors.
Error: sevaral Suggestion: several
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argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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suggestions:
you are on the wrong track for arguments. need to read a good GRE book on how to argue, and read more sample essays.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 524 350
No. of Characters: 2731 1500
No. of Different Words: 216 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.784 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.212 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.696 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 224 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 172 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 109 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.154 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.75 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.518 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.11 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 72, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
... for which there is no better evidence. Hence the argument can be unsubstantiated an...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 33, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ls the little credible support for the authors argument. First of all, the argument c...
^^^^^^^
Line 12, column 75, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ive years. Here, the author not provide a absolute value of how many seafood dis...
^
Line 13, column 5, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun seafood seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much seafood', 'a good deal of seafood'.
Suggestion: much seafood; a good deal of seafood
...or not provide a absolute value of how many seafood dishes increase. It may be possible peo...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 14, column 23, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...seafood and this dishes are increased. so, the argument does not said that all se...
^^
Line 14, column 49, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'say'
Suggestion: say
...re increased. so, the argument does not said that all seafood dishes 30 percent inc...
^^^^
Line 18, column 62, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: a; the
... is again weak and unsupported claim as a the argument does not demonstrate any stat...
^^^^^
Line 21, column 79, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...o-income families that is more wishful. Also the argument stated that the this peop...
^^^^
Line 22, column 13, Rule ID: DT_DT[2]
Message: Maybe you need to remove the second determiner so that only 'the' or 'this' is left.
Suggestion: the; this
...wishful. Also the argument stated that the this people are more concern about healthful...
^^^^^^^^
Line 22, column 17, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ful. Also the argument stated that the this people are more concern about healthful...
^^^^
Line 24, column 41, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...some restaurant provide a good seafood. so, these are assumptions that does not co...
^^
Line 30, column 25, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'predicted'.
Suggestion: predicted
... This is again weak assumption that is predict popularity of this restaurant without m...
^^^^^^^
Line 31, column 73, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... reveals liitle credible support of the authors argument with respect to several criti...
^^^^^^^
Line 32, column 67, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'question'?
Suggestion: question
...l points and raises a several skeptical questions. Without answer of this questions the ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 33, column 1, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...skeptical questions. Without answer of this questions the reader left with the impr...
^^^^
Line 35, column 20, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...r than substantive. In conclusion, the authors conclusion is unpersuasive as it stands...
^^^^^^^
Line 36, column 50, Rule ID: PRP_RB_NO_VB[1]
Message: Are you missing a verb?
...st provide better concrete evidence. It considerably strengthed if the author mentions all relevant fa...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 38, column 65, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... contributing factors. As a result, the authors conclusion has a not legs to stands.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, lastly, may, second, so, for example, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 16.3942115768 177% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2843.0 2260.96107784 126% => OK
No of words: 524.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42557251908 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7844588288 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75589633331 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.419847328244 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 870.3 705.55239521 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 19.7664670659 142% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.487852596 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.535714286 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64285714286 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 37.0 5.15768463074 717% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317365915956 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972074543059 0.0743258471296 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.148091580475 0.0701772020484 211% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867166283034 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106679933658 0.0628817314937 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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