A recent sales study indicates that consumption of seafood dishes in Bay City restaurants has increased by 30 percent during the past five years. Yet there are no currently operating city restaurants whose specialty is seafood. Moreover, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families, and a nationwide study has shown that such families eat significantly fewer home-cooked meals than they did a decade ago but at the same time express more concern about healthful eating. Therefore, the new Captain Seafood restaurant that specializes in seafood should be quite popular and profitable.
According to the author, the majority of families in Bay City are two-income families and studies have shown that members of these families eat fewer home cooked food. Therefore, the newly opened Captain Seafood restaurant is going to be both popular and profitable in Bay City. Evidences given by the author are both vague and uncomplete resulting into low creditablity of his statements.
Firstly, author has used the statistic that the consumption of seafood dishes has increased by 30 percent over the past five years. Yet there is not currently operating seafood restaurant in the town. If there are no seafood restaurants then how did he came with the number describing about the popularity of the food in the city. Thus, the evidence provided by him doesn't look valid enough to be considered.
In addition to it, he has made a point that the families in the Bay City are two-income families, they like to eat outside rather than home cooked food. Also, he has made a point that the families are more concerned about the quality of food they are eating. Families are more attracted towards healthy food rather than unhygenic food. To justify this point, auhtor has not provided with any prrof of hygenic food developed in the newly opened restaturant. Hence, the assumption of restaurnt being popular sounds vague.
Thirdly, author has not provided any proof of the Captain Seafood restaurant be authentic when the specialization of seafood is considered. The quality of the chefs, the receipes, the dishes, the variety of food etc none of this had been taken into account by the author. Therefore, the statement of author is as baseless as the restaurant without these qualities would be.
Author had taken the fact into account, if there is no competitors in your way then you win. But the liking of a city is largely based on the statistic and less on the verbal sayings. People are going to check for the quality and the quantity of the services for which they are paying for. In other words, name alone would not work for the restaurant to be popular among people.
In the end to sum up, i totally disagree with the author's assumption that if no seafood restaurants are available and the people are willing to eat outside then the restaurant opened will be quite popular. It's the quality of food that attracts the customer. Author should have provided evidences and statistics more about the quality of food, the ambiance or the service provided by the restaurant. It should not have compared the restaurant with other restaurant having already a low bar set.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 440 350
No. of Characters: 2088 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.58 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.745 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.518 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 143 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.13 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.402 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.565 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.303 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...erating seafood restaurant in the town. If there are no seafood restaurants then h...
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Line 3, column 367, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ity. Thus, the evidence provided by him doesnt look valid enough to be considered. ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 44, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no competitors'?
Suggestion: there are no competitors
...hor had taken the fact into account, if there is no competitors in your way then you win. But the likin...
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Line 12, column 51, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... to sum up, i totally disagree with the authors assumption that if no seafood restaura...
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Line 12, column 58, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... up, i totally disagree with the authors assumption that if no seafood restaurant...
^^
Line 12, column 208, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...estaurant opened will be quite popular. Its the quality of food that attracts the c...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, in addition, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 2260.96107784 95% => OK
No of words: 439.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89521640091 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56996271584 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4715261959 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.3205681308 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4347826087 119.503703932 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0869565217 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4347826087 5.70786347227 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22975488941 0.218282227539 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0722222282463 0.0743258471296 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.09509502981 0.0701772020484 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133653739972 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105634114095 0.0628817314937 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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