The above argument is flawed for numerous reasons, because there are many assumptions that are states are illogical and with no evidence provided, firstly, author compares the human cortisol and monkey cortisol levels, study is shown is weather empirical or theoretical.
Firstly, the author states that recent study is shown many statements,there is no evidence or measurement that recent study is genuine, the author did not mentioned weather the study is empirical or theoretical, though if it is empirical , it is not shown that recent study is based on sample data, to strengthen that recent study is genuine, the author could mention about data statistics.
Moreover, the author stated that human and monkeys level of cortisol is same, there is insufficient evidence provided, to evaluate or explain the statement , the author has to provide a common relation on cortisol levels such as humans and monkeys has a same cortisol functionalities
The study showed that in stimulating situations (such as an encounter with an unfamiliar monkey), firstborn infant monkeys produce up to twice as much of the hormone cortisol, which primes the body for increased activity levels, as do their younger siblings,there is an insufficient evidence for the given statement, some information that to be given to assume as a fact. The alternate explanation is infant monkeys are more observant than the younger monkeys. Monkeys who give the birth for first time ,they produce more hormone cortisol in firstborn infant monkey than younger.
To conclude, there are many statements with insufficient evidence, more sufficient explanation has to be given.
Essay evaluation report
samples:
https://www.testbig.com/story/gre-argument-essay-topic-2-outline
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 260 350
No. of Characters: 1347 1500
No. of Different Words: 119 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.016 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.181 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.715 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 109 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 37.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.932 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.464 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.85 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...numerous reasons, because there are many assumptions that are states are illogica...
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...dence provided, firstly, author compares the human cortisol and monkey cortisol l...
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...man cortisol and monkey cortisol levels, study is shown is weather empirical or t...
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...n is weather empirical or theoretical. Firstly, the author states that recent s...
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...ls such as humans and monkeys has a same cortisol functionalities The study s...
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...nt evidence, more sufficient explanation has to be given.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, moreover, so, then, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 12.9520958084 8% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 20.0 55.5748502994 36% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1394.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 258.0 441.139720559 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40310077519 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92981005907 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 204.123752495 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496124031008 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 22.8473053892 188% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 202.488477038 57.8364921388 350% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 232.333333333 119.503703932 194% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.0 23.324526521 184% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.70786347227 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.344849140363 0.218282227539 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152414125918 0.0743258471296 205% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103148286386 0.0701772020484 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153671456569 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.119347397352 0.0628817314937 190% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.5 14.3799401198 177% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 19.37 48.3550499002 40% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.2 12.197005988 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.93 12.5979740519 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.18 8.32208582834 122% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 12.3882235529 238% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 19.2 11.1389221557 172% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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