A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal re

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A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

While it might ultimately be the case that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay, we cannot conclude this from the argument as it stands now. The author overlooks numerous factors that might lead to the same fact that children living in Himalayan mountain region have lower levels of tooth decay then children living in suburban areas in the United States.

Primarily, the author ignores the possibilities that the difference in diet can influence a lot on children's dental health. There is no evidence provided in the argument that proves the diet is not the reason for the difference in levels of tooth decay. In fact, it is possible that children in Nepal do not have as much sweet stuff such as candies, ice creams, cakes and chocolates in their diet, while American children have a bunch of them. I this is the case, one of the alternative explanation could be that the modern sweet snacks make children's teeth less heath regardless of the professional dental care.

In addition, the author should also investigate that if people in Nepal have some traditional method to protect their teeth. Although people in the Himalayan mountain region receive little modern dental care, it might be the case that, throughout the development in history, their society has invented some special way such as using herbs to keep their teeth clean and healthy. As a consequence another explanation for the given fact could be that traditional dental care of Nepal is useful for preventing tooth decay.

Finally,the author fails to take into account that DNA plays an important role in human health. Even if the diet do not have impact on children's tooth and people in Nepal do not have other ways to protect teeth, we still do not know if the difference in DNA influence people's teeth health. It is possible that children in Nepal have some good DNA that makes their teeth stronger than children in other places. Thus, without considering and ruling out all of these and other possibilities, the credibility of the explanation is still open to doubt.

Clearly, then we need to have additional information in order to get more complete understanding of the strength and weakness of this explanation.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, look, so, still, then, thus, while, in addition, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 373.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95978552279 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62715434001 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 204.123752495 90% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493297587131 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3082612679 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.142857143 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6428571429 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.70786347227 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335090942425 0.218282227539 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110626155279 0.0743258471296 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13382667244 0.0701772020484 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176153786604 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.122756973719 0.0628817314937 195% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 98.500998004 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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