A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal re

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A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.

Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.

The argument is based on a recent study which posits that children in Nepal's mountain region have shown lower levels of tooth decay than children in suburban areas in the United States. Then, this argument concludes that regular dental care is not generaly helpful in preventing tooth decay. clearly this conclujion is not based on enough evidence. There are flaws in the form of assumptions that are far-fetched and it will be discussed what are the alternative reasons that could account for the different teeth shape in the given reigons.

First, the diet of Nepal mountain reginon kids is fundementally different than the diet of US suburban areas. Many studies have shown the problem of western diet which includes too much sugar and gluten in it. Yet, the food in Nepal is basic and based on rise. It is very plausible that the better shape of Napals kids is due to that they are consuming healthier food on their regular diet. Therefor, avoiding the know hazards of sugar-rich diet which the noted kids in the US are suffering from.

Secondly, Another possible explantion for the better shape of Nepals mountain children is their genetics. The Napal population is a very specific one and the people their have very homogeneous features. People of Nepal might posses stronger teeth that was picked in the never ending process of their evolotion to fit into the harsh environment of the cold and unwelcoming winter of the Himalayas. Having a stonger teeth might played a more significant effect there, giving the people of Nepal strong teeth genes that will enable them to survive. The US suburbian population, in contrast, are a mix of different genes that may or may not posses a need for stronger teeth.

Additonally , the two groups are not represntative of the whole world population. Thus, to conclude a general statement based on this two grop only is misleading. A massively bigger study could address this problem and shed a new light on its cursory conclojions. In field science the minimum to draw a conclusion is three groups and here we see only two. So examining more populations that are much more similar to The US will show a more viable result in which to rely on as far as conclujions.

To conclude, there are good reasons why Nepal mountain kids could have posses a better health regarding their tooth decay. Nuterition and Genetics may play a large role in that aspect. It is plausibly that a combination of these two factors is responsible for the better condition of Napal's kids teeth. Therefore, rushing to conclude anything on US kids dental health based on Nepal's kids dental health is not responsible.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 28.8173652695 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2196.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 449.0 441.139720559 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89086859688 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59790989114 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494432071269 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.2595355499 57.8364921388 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4782608696 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5217391304 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.60869565217 5.70786347227 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222974037922 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615069903386 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117498877346 0.0701772020484 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123610383915 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979268178548 0.0628817314937 156% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 98.500998004 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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