A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal re

Although the relation between levels of tooth decay and no. of visits for professional dental care seem to suggest an inverse relationship, the argument overlooks several other factors before reaching to the conclusion that regular dental care does not prevent tooth decay.

The comparison in the argument is drawn between two distinct geographical locations. Where Nepal, surrounded by Himalayas, does not have much industries, motor vehicles and hence significantly lower levels of air pollution, on the other hand, the suburban areas in US are relatively more polluted. This implies the chemical composition of air in both the areas must be very different which may impact the health of gums. Also, the level of contamination of water in US must be higher than Nepal which might be be one of the reasons of greater levels of tooth decay in the US.

Second, the eating habits of the populace in the two locations must be very different. Due to the presence of various fast food chains like KFC, McDonald's in the suburban areas in the US, an average American must be consuming more junk food than a person residing in mountains where access to these easily available fast foods must be difficult. This difference in eating habits might be one of the reasons for lower tooth decay among Himalayan people.

Although professional dental care in Nepal is limited, the Nepalese people have access to a plethora of herbs found in the Himalayas. Knowledge of herbs might be very common among Nepalese people and hence they might themselves be their own doctors whereas people in US have to rely on professionals only.

Having stated the above differences, the regular dental care could actually be less helpful among people of suburban US areas. Due to the busy lives those people lead, if they are remiss in taking medications properly then the dental care might not be efficacious.

In conclusion the above points need to be considered before drawing an extreme conclusion like the one mentioned in the argument.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
... surrounded by Himalayas, does not have much industries, motor vehicles and hence si...
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Line 3, column 508, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: be
...S must be higher than Nepal which might be be one of the reasons of greater levels of...
^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'hence', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'whereas', 'in conclusion', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.271468144044 0.25644967241 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.130193905817 0.15541462614 84% => OK
Adjectives: 0.116343490305 0.0836205057962 139% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0443213296399 0.0520304965353 85% => OK
Pronouns: 0.01108033241 0.0272364105082 41% => OK
Prepositions: 0.146814404432 0.125424944231 117% => OK
Participles: 0.0415512465374 0.0416121511921 100% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.66940976678 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0221606648199 0.026700313972 83% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.113573407202 0.113004496875 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0332409972299 0.0255425247493 130% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.01108033241 0.0127820249294 87% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2018.0 2731.13054187 74% => OK
No of words: 334.0 446.07635468 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.04191616766 6.12365571057 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27500489853 4.57801047555 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.359281437126 0.378187486979 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.248502994012 0.287650121315 86% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.182634730539 0.208842608468 87% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116766467066 0.135150697306 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66940976678 2.79052419416 96% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 207.018472906 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51497005988 0.469332199767 110% => OK
Word variations: 53.737771185 52.1807786196 103% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.039408867 70% => OK
Sentence length: 23.8571428571 23.2022227129 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4507211536 57.7814097925 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.142857143 141.986410481 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 23.2022227129 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.857142857143 0.724660767414 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.14285714286 117% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.58251231527 56% => OK
Readability: 48.7074422583 51.9672348444 94% => OK
Elegance: 2.4776119403 1.8405768891 135% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460675899773 0.441005458295 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.144072661837 0.135418324435 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0690858331079 0.0829849096947 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.703166538566 0.58762219726 120% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.144989177537 0.147661913831 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.233947486377 0.193483328276 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742350062823 0.0970749176394 76% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.365409230061 0.42659136922 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.111832526091 0.0774707102158 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2910404631 0.312017818177 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0863121892332 0.0698173142475 124% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 6.46551724138 62% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 5.36822660099 56% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 14.657635468 68% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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