A recent study indicates that children living in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal have lower levels of tooth decay than children living in suburban areas in the United States, despite the fact that people in the Himalayan mountain region in Nepal receive little to no professional dental care, while people in suburban areas in the United States see a dentist an average of 1.25 times per year. Thus, regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay.
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Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
The conclusion that this argument draws eschews rational thinking with respect to the modern Healthcare principles that doctors and other healthcare professionals vouch upon.
The argument provides a survey as its sole reasoning tool to a largely critical conclusion. However, the specifics of the survey are equivocated and thereby it is not logical enough to cogent the reader to agree with the conclusion comprehended. The survey mentioned does not specify the age group of children that was considered in the process in both the locations - Nepal and the United States. A younger age group of children could have been taken into account in the United States as opposed to the children in Nepal. It is a proven fact that younger children are more susceptible to developing tooth decays as opposed to the relatively elder ones.
Moreover, the argument compares Children from two entirely different geographical areas. Human bodies have evolved for over thousands of years to adapt to the specific geographical locations where they build their habitat. Hence, the body chemistry of children from Nepal could be different from those in the United States. The wild and bucolic lifestyle on the mountains for the people of Nepal could have made their body evolve accordingly that their teeth and gums are stronger than the people who have evolved through urban living nature in the United States.
A recent survey by the Healthcare department of the United States says that every child in the US who is younger than 15 years old, on an average consumes about 1000 Kilograms of sugar every year. It also points that this is the highest amount of sugar that any child consumes while comparing with average sugar consumption of children all around the world. This survey makes it inevitable that compared to any of the child from around the world, a kid from the US could be more prone to developing tooth decays at a young age.
A famous Nutritionist on her thesis called 'Healthy food cultures', claims that the native Nepalese food is very rich in anti-oxidants and calcium. Further, it adds that this level of calcium is the highest among every other food culture or cuisine around the world. Abiding by this report, we can most certainly point that a significant reason behind Nepalese children having a good oral health is due to their food habits.
Had the argument mentioned more convincing details on the survey or made a median to normalize comparing between two geographically distant locations, the conclusion would have been more convincing.
The argument provides a vague point to draw a critical conclusion that regular dental care is not helpful in preventing tooth decay. Due to the above mentioned logical fallacies, the argument given therefore does not provide a credible conclusion.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 460 350
No. of Characters: 2300 1500
No. of Different Words: 227 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.631 4.7
Average Word Length: 5 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.593 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 122 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.023 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.368 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.634 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2354.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 460.0 441.139720559 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11739130435 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6427341769 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497826086957 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 735.3 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6799468332 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.894736842 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2105263158 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52631578947 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.19510662607 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0576120340636 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626630431191 0.0701772020484 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0734770121368 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0703600148789 0.0628817314937 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.3799401198 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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