recent study rating 300 male and female mentian advertising
The author concludes by suggesting that in order to run a successful business , the owners shoulf hire prople who need less than 6 hours of sleep. He's argument is based on study held on Mentian Advertising executives. However the arguments has two serious flaws.
Firstly, the argument does not specify the how the sleep trends of 300 employees where measured. If any proper method was not adopted to to measure the sleep trends then, the sleep time data might be incorrect as people can not always provide the correct sleep time details. Moreover the argument does not put light on duration of the study. If the obeservation were made only for one week then it makes a lousy study and can not trusted.
Secondly, the argument is based on subject size of only 300 employee which is not appropriate for the making generalized statement. What if the majority of employee out of the 300 sleep less because of the advertizing work presure. Nevertheless, these employee might we working when not sleeping so, they have higher margin profit and faster growth. Whereas making generatlization to hire people who sleep might also include the people who are not hard working and just like to sleep late by doing other activites like watching TV or series. People like these even though fulfil the creteria of sleeping less than 6 hours, will not be productive and will also not have higher profits or growth, instead it will be bad decision for the company.
In conclusion, the argument is not strong in current stand. The argument needs more information about the study and include more subjects in order to make it generalize.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 277 350
No. of Characters: 1316 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.08 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.751 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.443 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 90 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 41 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.786 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.653 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.555 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 78, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...at in order to run a successful business , the owners shoulf hire prople who need ...
^^
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: He's
...le who need less than 6 hours of sleep. Hes argument is based on study held on Ment...
^^^
Line 1, column 219, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...held on Mentian Advertising executives. However the arguments has two serious flaws. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 40, Rule ID: THE_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'how'?
Suggestion: how
... Firstly, the argument does not specify the how the sleep trends of 300 employees where...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 135, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...d. If any proper method was not adopted to to measure the sleep trends then, the slee...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 276, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...provide the correct sleep time details. Moreover the argument does not put light on dura...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 431, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'trust'
Suggestion: trust
...then it makes a lousy study and can not trusted. Secondly, the argument is based ...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 61, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'employee' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'employees'.
Suggestion: employees
...nt is based on subject size of only 300 employee which is not appropriate for the making...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 180, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the majority of employee out of the 300 sleep less because of the advertizing wo...
^^
Line 9, column 248, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this employee' or 'these employees'?
Suggestion: this employee; these employees
...advertizing work presure. Nevertheless, these employee might we working when not sleeping so, ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 15, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on for the company. In conclusion, the argument is not strong in current ...
^^
Line 13, column 20, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r the company. In conclusion, the argument is not strong in current stand...
^^
Line 13, column 30, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...any. In conclusion, the argument is not strong in current stand. The argu...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 28.8173652695 28% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 55.5748502994 50% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1356.0 2260.96107784 60% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 277.0 441.139720559 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89530685921 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5334264491 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581227436823 0.468620217663 124% => OK
syllable_count: 409.5 705.55239521 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.4302925677 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.8571428571 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7857142857 23.324526521 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.78571428571 5.70786347227 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0775966533432 0.218282227539 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0356999546101 0.0743258471296 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601914067821 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0551607556342 0.128457276422 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308383635315 0.0628817314937 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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