"To reverse a decline in listener numbers, our owners have decided that WWAC must change from its current rock-music format. The decline has occurred despite population growth in our listening area, but that growth has resulted mainly from people moving here after their retirement. We must make listeners of these new residents. We could switch to a music format tailored to their tastes, but a continuing decline in local sales of recorded music suggests limited interest in music. Instead we should change to a news and talk format, a form of radio that is increasingly popular in our area."
The author recommends changing the format from rock-music format to news-and-talk format. The reasoning of the author is in the line that, musis listeners are declining in the area whereas the population of the area is increasing. The author suggests to change the format of the music station, in order to make the radio station popular. there are several flaws in the argument.
Firstly, the author states that, the new population moving to area are mostly retired people and that they have least interest in music therefore, several local stores are closed recently. this argument is not convincing as there can several other reaons because of which the music shops could have been closed. For example, now a days, people are accustomed to listening music through their phone as numerous online music libraries are avilable today which are of low cost and and readily available. The author fails to consider any such secnario, neither he is has provided any any evidence to support his assumption.
secondly, the author assumes that since most of the new population are retire people so, they will love the news-and-talk show format. this assumption is dubious, the author could states proper evidence in to support his argument. For instance, he could have conducted an survey and will the results of the survey, he could have provided proper reasons for suggesting the format-change rather the changing to another music. With is argument, there is no surety that after changing the format of the show will be cent percent hit.
Lastly, the author suggests to change the format of the show to news-and-talk format, but doing this author does not consider about current listeners. there is not points to support if the current listeners are also going to like the particulare show. The author needs to provide answe, if the cuurent listener will continue listening to the show or not. if not then show is flop.
In sum, the argument made by the author for suggesting change for show format is not convincing. he needs to keep in check a number of question in order to make his argument strong, like if the new population likes new-and-talk show, if the current listeners will like it or not.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 370 350
No. of Characters: 1782 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.386 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.816 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.471 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.796 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.432 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.678 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.196 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 232, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e population of the area is increasing. The author suggests to change the format of...
^^^
Line 1, column 339, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...rder to make the radio station popular. there are several flaws in the argument. ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 108, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'have the least'.
Suggestion: have the least
...are mostly retired people and that they have least interest in music therefore, several lo...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 190, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...veral local stores are closed recently. this argument is not convincing as there can...
^^^^
Line 7, column 326, Rule ID: NOW_A_DAYS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nowadays'?
Suggestion: nowadays
...ps could have been closed. For example, now a days, people are accustomed to listening mu...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 330, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...ould have been closed. For example, now a days, people are accustomed to listening mu...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 337, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ve been closed. For example, now a days, people are accustomed to listening music...
^^
Line 7, column 476, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: and
...re avilable today which are of low cost and and readily available. The author fails to ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 578, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: any
...ch secnario, neither he is has provided any any evidence to support his assumption. ...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
...ence to support his assumption. secondly, the author assumes that since most of ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 136, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ill love the news-and-talk show format. this assumption is dubious, the author could...
^^^^
Line 13, column 181, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'state'
Suggestion: state
...assumption is dubious, the author could states proper evidence in to support his argum...
^^^^^^
Line 13, column 270, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
.... For instance, he could have conducted an survey and will the results of the surv...
^^
Line 13, column 472, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... argument, there is no surety that after changing the format of the show will be ...
^^
Line 19, column 152, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
...s not consider about current listeners. there is not points to support if the current...
^^^^^
Line 19, column 356, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... continue listening to the show or not. if not then show is flop. In sum, ...
^^
Line 19, column 356, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... continue listening to the show or not. if not then show is flop. In sum, ...
^^
Line 25, column 98, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...ange for show format is not convincing. he needs to keep in check a number of ques...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, lastly, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1856.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 370.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01621621622 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54875039205 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.464864864865 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 567.0 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3136115768 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.111111111 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5555555556 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.22222222222 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.25449101796 343% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194691083192 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681066641513 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0539181270301 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123898555259 0.128457276422 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0540936867897 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 12.3882235529 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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