The passage concludes that if a business wants to flourish, employees should be hired on the basis of number of hours they sleep. The highlight benefits it will pose to the company based on the recent study conducted. While at first reading the argument seems quite conceivable, a closer look spells out a number of assumptions that could undermine its assessment.
To begin with, the author says that the study has been conducted on 300 females and males executives of a firm. The number of participants of the study are very less. Three hundred is not a significant number that can be made basis to take such a big decision. It may be the case that the participants of the study do not need much sleep then also they can work with efficacy. This may not be case with other people. Every individual's body work differently and so are the needs of sleep to maintain health. If a person is not taking proper sleep then he/she might not be able to focus on work efficiently. Thus, before coming to any conclusion author should do some more research on authenticity of the study. Moreover, survey can be conducted in which large number of people should be surveyed and accordingly decision should be made.
Secondly, arguer is making connection between higher profit of the company with number of hours executives are sleeping. There is no evidence given in the passage that indicates the relationship between these two factors. The duration of study conducted is not mentioned. It is an important question which needs to be answered that for how many days participants were under observation. Perhaps the study was conducted for 15-20 days, and during those days the executives were sleeping less than 6 hours per night as the wok load was high. Therefore, faster growth and prosperity of a company does not depend solely upon the sleeping hours of executives.
Finally, The text is missing many important details of the study. The study cannot be relied upon, whose number of participants are less and number of days for which it was conducted is unknown. Thus, it cannot be considered as parameter to measure the efficiency of an employee. There are may be many executives of different company who sleeps for more than 6 hours and are doing justice with their role. The executives of several companies should be included in this study to see a common pattern and then conclusion should be derived.
To conclude, though it seems that author has done some research before backing the prospect that sleeping hours of executives of company is related to the higher growth and faster prosperity of business, an in-depth scrutiny reveals that none of the arguments put forth are backed by exhaustive analysis; thus, providing little credible support. As it stands, the recommendation looks flawed in multiple respects and may not give the results the author expects.
Essay evaluation report
Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 486 350
No. of Characters: 2330 1500
No. of Different Words: 235 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.695 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.794 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.587 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 112 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 83 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.44 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.617 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.68 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.281 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.469 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 418, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
...This may not be case with other people. Every individuals body work differently and s...
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Line 3, column 508, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the needs of sleep to maintain health. If a person is not taking proper sleep the...
^^
Line 3, column 837, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd accordingly decision should be made. Secondly, arguer is making connection be...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, finally, first, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.6327345309 183% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2387.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 485.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92164948454 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66012464977 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 204.123752495 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494845360825 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.1117265199 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.48 119.503703932 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24444345282 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0683490253495 0.0743258471296 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0525276311056 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138250236407 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428412863572 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.3799401198 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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