A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night." Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author of the argument states that in order for a business to proper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night. To buttress his/her argument, the author cites the following evidences: the executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher margins and faster growth based on a recent study. Tough the issue has merit, due to lack of convincing evidences and unaddressed assumptions, the conclusion is unsubstantiated and flawed.
To begin with, the author unfairly assumes that result conducted by recent study is valid. Since the study is only based on 300 people, the sample size might not be large enough and all the participants in the survey might represent all people in different businesses. The author fails to provide detailed information about the study. How many males and females took part in this study respectively? What are the ages, positions and characteritistics of those people? The hours reported by the executives are not necessarily equal to the exact sleep hour. some employees, in order to show their deligence, reported the sleep hours less than true ones. Without the credibility of data collected by the study, we are not able to draw the conclusion readily. In addition, the study is only based on Mentian advertising, so that it might not be applied to other businesses, as structures and characteristics of business can vary significantly.
Moreover, the author attributes the better performances of individuals sole to the sleep hours. many other factors remain unexamined. For example, some employees perhaps have wider knowledge base and more sophisticated skills, thereby improving the effiency of their work. some, apt at learning and devoting more time on their positions, are more likely to earn higher profit margin. In terms of firm, the success secret can be their skilled manipulation and reasonable policies. Therefore, there are many other possibilities leading to better performance of each individuals. Unless excluding other potential causes, the conclusion is ungrounded.
Last but not least, the author assumes that only hiring workers who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night is beneficial to propersity of the businesss. The assumption, nevertheless, is invalid. there is no convincing method to measure sleep hour of every individual and sleeping hours can differ from day to day. The companies are unlikely to know the correct sleeping hours, because some people would lessen their sleep hours temporary to get the job. Furthermore, the author does not evaluate the potential harm after implementing such policies. The shortened sleep hour does not mean that people devote all the rest of time into work. some, instead, play computer games or just chatting with friends, which wastes their rigor and make them exhausted. people on the next day, might be sleep and reduce their efficiency a lot. sleep, on the other hand, can make people relaxed and prepare better for tomorrow's task.
To sum up, as it stands, the conclusion drawn by the author is relied on several questionable and unstated assumptions, to further strengthen his/her argument, the author is suggested to include the evidences as follows: first, whether the recent study is presuasive and representative; second, whether there is causal effect between sleeping hour and profit margin or the better performances are caused by other reasons; finally, whether the condition and profit can be increased dramatically owing to hiring only people with short sleeping hours.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 573 350
No. of Characters: 2906 1500
No. of Different Words: 280 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.893 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.072 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.744 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 202 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 140 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 77 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.913 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.717 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.435 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.291 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.482 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.086 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Some
...essarily equal to the exact sleep hour. some employees, in order to show their delig...
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Suggestion:
...ics of business can vary significantly. Moreover, the author attributes the bett...
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Suggestion: Many
...of individuals sole to the sleep hours. many other factors remain unexamined. For ex...
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Suggestion: Some
...y improving the effiency of their work. some, apt at learning and devoting more time...
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Suggestion: There
...e assumption, nevertheless, is invalid. there is no convincing method to measure slee...
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...es their rigor and make them exhausted. people on the next day, might be sleep and red...
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Suggestion: Sleep
...leep and reduce their efficiency a lot. sleep, on the other hand, can make people rel...
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Suggestion:
... and prepare better for tomorrows task. To sum up, as it stands, the conclusion ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, so, then, therefore, for example, in addition, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 11.1786427146 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 55.5748502994 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2995.0 2260.96107784 132% => OK
No of words: 571.0 441.139720559 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24518388792 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88831323574 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84296280047 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 295.0 204.123752495 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516637478109 0.468620217663 110% => OK
syllable_count: 918.0 705.55239521 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 18.0 8.76447105788 205% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 19.7664670659 147% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 89.9856376438 57.8364921388 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.275862069 119.503703932 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6896551724 23.324526521 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.51724137931 5.70786347227 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245034474926 0.218282227539 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0613557259697 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0601027461911 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137478060743 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541247343521 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 151.0 98.500998004 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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