"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
In a business magazine, a writer has asserted that, to be successful, business companies should hire employees who need less than 6 hours of daily sleep. The writer has based his assertion on a recent survey of three hundred advertising executives which showed that profit was inversely proportional to the several hours the executives slept. While the assertion is ostensibly buttressed by the survey, it fails to give a holistic perspective; regrettably, rendering the entire argument standing on wobbly grounds and riddled with flaws.
The primary issue with the argument is its audacity to claim for any business to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night. This claim is too extreme to be applicable for all the businesses present in the real world. In a domain consisting of millions of people, the result of merely few hundred people does not instill a strong confidence. It is very likely that the sample of people studied, do not represent the general population. Moreover, it is highly likely that the working conditions and an advertising business’ expectation from its employees vary from other companies. It will not be fair to compare an advertising company to a consultancy firm or a construction company. Each of them has their own need and takes a different toll on the person working in it. It has been scientifically proven that lack of sleep affects judgement and adversely impacts decision making in human beings. An executive of some design and innovation firm is far less likely to come up with brilliant, out-of-the-box ideas if he is grumpy and tired because of the lack of sleep.
Secondly, the argument made in the magazine might have misconstrued the result of the survey as the survey says that the most profitable companies’ executives, on average, sleep less than 6 hours. While easy to overlook, one must understand the statistical measure of average is heavily influenced by outliers. What if the most profitable companies’ executive sleeps for 10 hours and someone in the list of “most profitable companies’ executive” sleeps for 2 hours? While the average would still turn out be 6 hours, but the entire basis of the claim turns to dust. It is important to scrutinize each entry in the survey to better understand the scenario.
Moreover, the argument is flagrantly wrong is assuming that the executives are the sole driver of a companies’ profit margins. Running a business is not a one-man show and needs the effort of all the shareholders and employees working in harmony to create a positive and encouraging environment for the business to prosper. No company becomes profitable over-night and needs dedication, persistence and hard-work from everyone, after all, Rome was not built-in a day.
In conclusion, the writer is wrong in making such a strong claim based on such a weak evidence to support it. He has failed to consider many other factors and might well have misinterpreted the implication of the statistical measure used in the survey. Therefore, a more comprehensive survey needs to be done before making a claim as strong and widely applicable as made by the writer.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 00 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 527 350
No. of Characters: 2577 1500
No. of Different Words: 250 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.791 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.89 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.801 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 192 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 139 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 102 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 72 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.913 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.5 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.522 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.276 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.488 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, while, after all, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2681.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 526.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0969581749 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05795450367 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 264.0 204.123752495 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501901140684 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 841.5 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.2386022757 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.565217391 119.503703932 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8695652174 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4347826087 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179379293929 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.04658123154 0.0743258471296 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0479655680988 0.0701772020484 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0960998947707 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0491588058151 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 98.500998004 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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