"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night.
The arguement suggests that a business will thrive better if the exceutives of the do not require more than six hours to sleep. However, this assumption cannot be generalised as there are a numbers of flaws in the assumption.
The number of exceutives that were used for the study might be a limited portion of the total number of exceutives in the firm. Also, only one firm was used and as such the findings cannot be concluded to be applicable to other firms that were not considered. Also, only the executives were used for the study, and a firm is made up of an hierarchy of workers, and most times the most important workers are not the executives but the subordinates. This means the growth in the firms might have been as a result of the inputs of other workers other than the excutives.
There are different factors reposible for how a worker functions, some of these factors are socio-economical, health related, psychological and many more. The length of the sleep time of a worker is just one factor out of thousands of other factors. It could be that the productivity of the executives are as a result of other factors and not the length of hours that they sleep, this factors might be responsible for thr higher profit margin in Mentian.
Furthermore, the survey only takes into consideration the sleep time per night. Sleep is not restricted to the night only, some people sleep during the day. Therefore, the survey should have included the sleep time of executives during the day as some excetives might be in the habit of taking naps during work time which might improved their productivity.
Although, a higher profit margin and faster growth in a company might suggest properity, this is not always true. Porsperity of a business cuts across different aspects of the business, some of which includes: good customer relation, good working environment for workers, endorsements and many other factors. Thus, just because the firm had a higher profit margin doesn't automatically mean it is propering and this cannot be generalised for other firms. Another flaw in the assumption is that, the firm that was used in the study was an advertising firm and as such cannot be used to understand the productivity of other firm that are not into advertisement.
In conclusion, the study should be carried out again in a more precise manner. All workers in the firm should be taking into consideration and surveyed thoruoghly. The study should also understand the trend pattern of other businesses that are prospering and adopt those patterns in other to attain optimum development in their firm.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 444 350
No. of Characters: 2116 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.59 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.766 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.694 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 138 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.368 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.686 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.329 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.619 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...will thrive better if the exceutives of the do not require more than six hours to slee...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 337, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...for the study, and a firm is made up of an hierarchy of workers, and most times th...
^^
Line 9, column 365, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...use the firm had a higher profit margin doesnt automatically mean it is propering and ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2171.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 443.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9006772009 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78869946799 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426636568849 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6419426895 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.263157895 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3157894737 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137933598103 0.218282227539 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505770263738 0.0743258471296 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.048813069129 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0786410000105 0.128457276422 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425356188996 0.0628817314937 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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