The following appeared in a letter from the faculty committee to the president of Seatown University:
A study conducted at nearby Oceania University showed that faculty retention is higher when professors are offered free tuition at the university for their own college-aged children. Therefore, Seatown should institute a free-tuition policy for its professors for the purpose of enhancing morale among the faculty and luring new professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument states that providing free tuition for professors'children in Seatown University will improve the morale of the professors just like it did in Oceania University.
Universities are different by definition and classification. Seatown and Oceania University are two different schools with different set-ups, facilities, salaries, students and many more. What works in Oceania University might not work in Seatown University. There was no evidence to show that the two schools are similar. Therefore, it can not be concluded that what works in Oceania university will be successful in Seatown University.
Professors in Seatown university might not have college-aged children. Therefore, giving free tuition to them for their children will make no difference in encouraging the professors. There are different ways of giving incentives that might prove more beneficial to Professors at Seatown University. Some of which are: providing free stipends to cover travel expenses for research works, giving grants, providing free medical care and many more. Therefore, a survey should be carried out in Seatown to understand the needs of professor in other to serve them better.
Oceania university is just one university in the entire world. Using one university as a point of reference does not hold ground in making decisions about another university. Also, it was not specifically stated that Oceania and Seatwon university have any similarity in relation to their professors.
Therefore, to achieve the best results of encouraging professors, a research should be carried out before arriving at any conclusion, the author should survey as many universities as possible to understand how incentive are given to professors and which approach will be most successful in Seatown University by seeking the opinion of the professors at this university. This will ensure a more successful result.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 290 350
No. of Characters: 1576 1500
No. of Different Words: 135 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.127 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.434 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.927 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 126 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.125 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.488 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.312 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.379 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.594 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...work in Seatown University. There was no evidence to show that the two schools ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 289.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63667820069 5.12650576532 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10787518794 2.78398813304 112% => OK
Unique words: 137.0 204.123752495 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474048442907 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 705.55239521 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 73.6918997838 57.8364921388 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.8125 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0625 23.324526521 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.4375 5.70786347227 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285782857341 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106864698103 0.0743258471296 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587047284231 0.0701772020484 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178758725362 0.128457276422 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268712607943 0.0628817314937 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 48.3550499002 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.5979740519 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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