"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The article determines the results on a study as people sleeping less than 6 hours per night are more efficient whereas this might not be the only reason that shall be considered. It is evident that the article is rife with holes of unstated assumptions, three of which are examined below to show that the article and the study holds no water.
First of all, the article lacks in many details of the study conducted. What was the male-female ratio? According to a survey in Boston many female employees or working women need to do home chores after their work keeping them up longer as compared to men. This plays an important role here as if the female in the 300 executives were more in number compared to men, then the result is completely biased and could not be set as a hiring criterion. the author also presumed that the 300 executives had a routine sleep schedule in progress, where as it is possible that many were up late due to some other reason like hot weather condition, which are completely irrelevant to their job profile but were counted for.
Second of all, the author assumed that the sleep factor is enough for the company to book profits and faster growth. Employees' dedication is one of the factors for growth on firm and higher profit margins. Factors like leadership, clients, deadlines, quality pf work matter in any corporate business.
Finally, the author wants to believe that the executes reported the truth about their sleeping schedule and were completely honest, which might not be true for all the people. The author did not share the test results as in what percentage of people voted for less than 6 hours of sleep. A result of 75%-25% ratio is not acceptable or more to say can hold grounds for his conclusion.
Hence the above stated assumptions of the author make the study, its result and the conclusion -’ These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night.’ irrelevant and of no sense in predicting one sleep schedule and his company’s prosperity.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 363 350
No. of Characters: 1666 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.365 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.59 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.365 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 47 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.923 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.61 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.611 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.087 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[3]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...after their work keeping them up longer as compared to men. This plays an importan...
^^
Line 3, column 450, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...could not be set as a hiring criterion. the author also presumed that the 300 execu...
^^^
Line 3, column 541, Rule ID: WHERE_AS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'whereas'?
Suggestion: whereas
...d a routine sleep schedule in progress, where as it is possible that many were up late d...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...an hold grounds for his conclusion. Hence the above stated assumptions of the aut...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 233, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Irrelevant
... less than 6 hours of sleep per night.’ irrelevant and of no sense in predicting one sleep...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, second, so, then, whereas, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 16.3942115768 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1728.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 364.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74725274725 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46599870633 2.78398813304 89% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541208791209 0.468620217663 115% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 705.55239521 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 75.9492311632 57.8364921388 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.428571429 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21267431448 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673654432271 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409269215602 0.0701772020484 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108545714191 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0442075779151 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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