Educational institutions should dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position
t seems a negatively stated statement with a direct intention in betterment of students’ lives and might lead to straight agreement of many others but here by I disagree with it. It is cogent enough why yet the following points will help support my stance.
First of all, educational institutes are strictly for educational purposes. Students get capable enough with time and gain enough maturity to decide their future field of study and profession. Succes doesn’t only mean loading up bank accounts but satisfaction is also a key necessity. Some even follow their passion on a low pay scale but are satisfied and call themselves successful.
Moreover, if educational institutes implement the above policy they would not only be biased and may cause a negative impact on students’ life and career. Students should be given freedom of choice to choose the career that suits them and additionally given a supporting hand by their parents, teachers and institutes. One someone loves his work he undoubtedly aces in it with excellence.
This policy also depends on what does successful field of study lists. And the lists is for sure changing as the generations change. In country like India where people uphold stereotypes to a next level, students would be either doctors or engineers as these fields are classified under successful. For example the pay scale of a real artist has seen an exponential growth over the years and is now a SUCCESSFUL profession and passion.
Lastly the policy not only discourages but also scares students. It scares them if burden and lack of motivation. Hence the implementation might lead to medical problems of depression blaming the educational institute.
The statement can save some lives of student helping them choose a better alternative but would affect large masses of students in worse manner. Hence to conclude and avoid unpleasant consequences ahead the policy should not be implemented in any educational institutes throughout the world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, lastly, may, moreover, so, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.3162921348 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 2235.4752809 75% => OK
No of words: 321.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24299065421 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88163172516 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.629283489097 0.4932671777 128% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0995479234 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8333333333 23.4991977007 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140403101041 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0414825940561 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396322615993 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0675282677087 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306004669959 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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