A recent study shows that people living on the continent of North America suffer 9 times more chronic fatigue and 31 times more chronic depression than do people living on the continent of Asia. Interestingly, Asians, on average, eat 20 grams of soy per day, whereas North Americans eat virtually none. It turns out that soy contains phytochemicals called isoflavones, which have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. Thus, North Americans should consider eating soy on a regular basis as a way of preventing fatigue and depression.
This passages claims that people of North America should consume soy regular for preventing fatigue and depression because people who live in Asia usually eat 20 grams soy per day and suffer much less. this reasoning has several flaws, and, therefore, is not convincing. The logic of argument is compromised because the author fails to mention some important aspects, suggests groundless cause-effect reasoning, uses incorrect generalization.
First of all, the author claims that lack of soy in the body leads to depression and fatigue.
When making such a statement author assumes that this is the only factor leading to such diseases. Indeed, the authors argumentation can seem logical at first glance.
However, the author fails to consider that there are many factors that affect human health. Of course, food is one of the most important factors, but the author mentioned only soy, without considering all other products. For example, the use of vegetables, fruits, fast food consumption, sugar, meat. Also, the state of health can be influenced by the environment, weather, political and economic situation in the country, as well as personal characteristics and relationships with family, friends, at work. therefore, the authors argument is doubtful because it contains a major flaw in reasoning. if the author had provide more relevant information, his argument would have been more convincing.
The argument points out that it is the consumption of soy that helps prevent depression and fatigue in Asians. Again, this point may seem reasonable and justified to inattentive reader.
Nevertheless, a careful analysis reveal a major weakness in author’s argument.
The author ignores to consider a possibility that soy consumption may have the opposite effect or no effect at all on human health. this problem could have been avoided if the author had provided comprehensive analysis off all facts and factors relevant to the matter.
Finally, the argument suggests that that isoflavones which have disease causing properties protect against depression and fatigue.
However, it may be the case that it is possible that isoflavones protect against other diseases, such as skin diseases or heart diseases.
But the author totally ignores to consider such a scenario in the passage.
this problem could have been avoided if the author had mention that isoflavones help fight depression and fatigue.
In conclusion, the argument that soy consumption protects against depression contains several logical inconsistencies: omission of important facts, incorrect analogy, flawed generalization.
The author’s reasoning, therefore, is doubtful and hardly convincing.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 407 350
No. of Characters: 2190 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.492 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.381 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.833 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 181 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 145 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 92 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.236 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.842 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.333 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.802 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.048 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 13 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'claim'.
Suggestion: claim
This passages claims that people of North America should co...
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Line 1, column 26, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
This passages claims that people of North America should consume s...
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Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...grams soy per day and suffer much less. this reasoning has several flaws, and, there...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oning, uses incorrect generalization. First of all, the author claims that lac...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...body leads to depression and fatigue. When making such a statement author assumes ...
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Line 7, column 112, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...r leading to such diseases. Indeed, the authors argumentation can seem logical at first...
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Line 9, column 509, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Therefore
...ionships with family, friends, at work. therefore, the authors argument is doubtful becau...
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Line 9, column 524, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...amily, friends, at work. therefore, the authors argument is doubtful because it contain...
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Line 9, column 600, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... it contains a major flaw in reasoning. if the author had provide more relevant in...
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Line 9, column 618, Rule ID: HAD_VBP[1]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
...or flaw in reasoning. if the author had provide more relevant information, his argument...
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Line 9, column 618, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
...or flaw in reasoning. if the author had provide more relevant information, his argument...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ent would have been more convincing. The argument points out that it is the c...
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Line 17, column 133, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...ct or no effect at all on human health. this problem could have been avoided if the ...
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Line 21, column 32, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: that
...er. Finally, the argument suggests that that isoflavones which have disease causing ...
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Line 27, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...sider such a scenario in the passage. this problem could have been avoided if the ...
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Line 29, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...es help fight depression and fatigue. In conclusion, the argument that soy con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, of course, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2309.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 407.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.67321867322 5.12650576532 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99910540503 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 204.123752495 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518427518428 0.468620217663 111% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.8079595537 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.391304348 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6956521739 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.60869565217 5.70786347227 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 13.0 5.15768463074 252% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 6.88822355289 203% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104728811243 0.218282227539 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0298013556838 0.0743258471296 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680386960041 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0360459016079 0.128457276422 28% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558281497952 0.0628817314937 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.31 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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