A recent study shows that people living on the continent of North America suffer 9 times more chronic fatigue and 31 times more chronic depression than do people living on the continent of Asia. Interestingly, Asians, on average, eat 20 grams of soy per day, whereas North Americans eat virtually none. It turns out that soy contains phytochemicals called isoflavones, which have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. Thus, North Americans should consider eating soy on a regular basis as a way of preventing fatigue and depression.
To start with the weak reasoning of the argument, the study conducted as mentioned in the argument has no supporting basis that states the specifications of subjects that were considered for the study. It doesn’t provide any details about the number of people who were a part of this study as test subjects. It fails to apprise us about the diversity of the participants of the study based on the regions they belonged to in their respective continents. North America and Asia being huge landmasses have vast diversity in terms of the people living on them and the food habits of people within themselves. Thus the reliability of the study can be demurred due to lack of substantial information and details.
The relation between the two diseases that are mentioned, namely “chronic fatigue” and “chronic depression” have not been discussed or clarified. There is no clarification by the author regarding the reason for selectively conducting tests on these two particular diseases and the lack of any explanation of their relation to each other discredits the study itself.
Moreover, there is no mention of the dependencies of these diseases on food. Without the relation between the food being consumed by an individual and the diseases in consideration it is next to impossible to come to any conclusion. As previously stated, whether the varying food habits based on regional influences in the continents were considered or not haven't been mentioned and thus complement the current reasoning. This excludes the possibility of evolution and adaptation that the people might have undergone due to them residing in different continents.
The argument stating soy of being a probable panacea for the diseases is based on weak reasoning that contents of soy, namely phytochemicals and isoflavones have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. The author has failed to provide evidence or the effect of the contents in soy, directly or indirectly towards these diseases, thus rendering the argument vague. It is a mere equivocation by the author where the general properties of contents of soy are stated without any clarification of the magnitude and the specificity of the effect it would have on the diseases that are the main concern.
Thus the author’s conclusion that North Americans should consider eating soy on a regular basis to prevent fatigue and depression is based on faltering arguments and the reasoning for the weakness of the arguments have been stated above.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 2056 1500
No. of Different Words: 183 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.089 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.96 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 123 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.558 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.358 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.358 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 607, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ood habits of people within themselves. Thus the reliability of the study can be dem...
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Line 3, column 357, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...n the continents were considered or not havent been mentioned and thus complement the ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...e diseases that are the main concern. Thus the author’s conclusion that North Amer...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, regarding, so, thus, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2105.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 402.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23631840796 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05383999489 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470149253731 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 705.55239521 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5855253436 57.8364921388 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.333333333 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.8 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.2 5.70786347227 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127231050179 0.218282227539 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0449966860028 0.0743258471296 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487232073589 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0728698631859 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345409584286 0.0628817314937 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.3799401198 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 98.500998004 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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